Tell Me

Lies, lies, lies, when will you be told the truth?

Tell me the truth

Tell me why you hide

Why do you turn away

Am I nothing now?

 

Has everything gone

done the drain

Am I loosing you

to someone else?

 

Tell me the truth

Tell me why you've changed

Why are you so Cold & distant

Am I wrong?

 

Have I changed

Going insane is almost

all I have to give now

And why do things seem

so strange?

-Signed, A broken girl

Author's Note

This is m-meant for a-anyone wh-who hasn't been t-to-to-told the truth

Reviews

[SmileBig :)]

This is...ok, but it doesn't have much of a flow, and correct me if I'm wrong, but I saw no rhyme scheme. Don't get me wrong, I'm a big fan of free verse, but I feel like you should separate it better, into different stanzas, not just two. Try four lines in each stanza. The meaning is good. I see potential you just have to let it come to life.

Also this is off topic but may I ask you why you do a letter then a dash then the word sooo much? I've just noticed it and i was curious.

Have a great day.

[Luna Kusan]

Hm? Dash? so much?
and, no I don't write poems that rhyme. I'm not to fond of the concept. Maybe a sonnet or a few lines that rhyme here or there, but free verse is my area. the only poetry I actually enjoy writting.

[SmileBig :)]

M-meant, A-anyone; that's what I mean. I'm wondering why you do it, it sounds like your stumbling on your words but when your writing that just seems pointless. At least it's not in ur poems, well from what I can tell. And I recommend you take some of my advice, I gave you a review so it could help you.

[Luna Kusan]

I write wh-what i speak. and I normally stumble over words. E-especially when I'm nervous or my sh-shyness comes out. It is a force of habbit since I have al-always wrote like this. Sometimes I can keep myself fr-from doing it, but it still occurs.

[SmileBig :)]

Oh ok gptcha

[Shaka-Greywolf]

I can understand the poem and i like it. Truth is always a good thing but sometimes..... reality and truth dont go hand in hand but great write. and dont be shy :)

[Rhianne Ney]

Yeah, being lied to isn't a good thing. Especially when it hurts you by the time you learned it. But sometimes we can't blame them, we also lie at our own pace. There are still some secrets hidden in our psyche which we don't want to reveal. Hence, resulting for us to lie about it

The highlights were giving off what you really feel which is also something essential for great writes (:

Good job and keep writing

[Luna Kusan]

th-thank you. And I un-under-understand what you mean.

[Rhianne Ney]

What's with the stutter? are you alright?

[Luna Kusan]

Mhm, I-it's a natrual reaction. I type wh-what I speak

[Rhianne Ney]

Oh, i see (: it makes it somewhat natural

[Luna Kusan]

Mhm :)

[Rhianne Ney]

(: