A writing binge

A glimpse into me, when I was away from the cafe' for less than an hour - a napkin jotting session --

across the sea

across the sea
he came to me
words on parchment
faded by the sun
he is there somewhere
under the clutter
inside a dark heart
he shone a light
for a moment
across the sea.

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 pen to paper

a long time since she put pen to paper
felt the words flow through and past
her calloused finger ---
like how she lets him linger,
whispering past the echoes of her mind
a desperate sheep looking for its keeper
true to her
true to be
to good to be
true he doesn't
love me.

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somewhere

I am not in love with you.
I love you.
and somewhere
truth
lies
in the heart
of the beholder
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I should have known I couldn't trust you
when you brought me marmalade and brie.
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fumbled

Reaching for her hand
in the dark
he fumbled
found her
heart.

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TIL DEATH

TIL DEATH
DO US
PART

KILLED
HER
HEART
TO
SET
HER
FREE

Author's Note

this is sort of a glimpse into how I write and the creative process for me -- sort of a mad rambling on paper -- it's been a while since I actually used paper and not straight to type, it felt kind of good.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing flow of poem. Each poem adding to the emotion and strength of the tale. The poem brought me in and held me to the last words. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much. I appreciate that, since I think your writing is outstanding in its honesty and clarity of thought, with wonderful imagery.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nothing like napkin poems...i used to write on napkins all the time...and often save them in books, only to go back later and fine much material that i could form into poems...there is a certain progression when that pen hits the napkin...i just have to be careful not to use a poem to wipe that sauce splatter from my lip...

nice journey here.

[Lyn Anderson]

Not as bad as when I used to put them through the wash.

[Nusquam Esse]

Only things I noticed of note were on the second poem, Alrighty, this is just a minor little thing, and not at all an actual error, but I felt I should shine some light on the matter. Callused usually refers exclusively to 'hardened skin' but Calloused carries an additional nuance of 'emotionally hardened' in addition to the prior meaning. Which spelling you use can subtly alter the nuances here, so your call. ;) An actual typo though, is that you should have used 'too' in "too good to be". And I am not entirely sure if the last be in the stanza was on purpose; did you mean 'me'? These are just little quibbles, but I have noticed that you often point out these small things in your reviews, so I wanted to return the gesture. All in all, these are entertaining, since they show a greater story of your 'writing binge' They are all much more interesting as a whole BECAUSE I know that you wrote them more-or-less, back to back.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, calloused I should change, because I prefer my O U Rs anyway -- being Canadian and all -- but, as for the to -- I do not mean TOO -- so it stands as is -- it is intended as a run on thought
that ends in me.:) the original was something a little different, but I like it with that particular twist. I appreciate the careful thought and time you put into your reviews. You are a rarity.:)

[Nusquam Esse]

ahhh, interesting, I didn't even consider that... whoops. You give thoughtful reviews, so I return in kind. If you regularly gave me one-liners, you could expect the same in return... ;)

[Lyn Anderson]

No whoops at all. The way I see it, sometimes something may be intentional, and sometimes not, and the only way we know the author's intent is to explore it.:)

[Blue]

Nusquam is known for giving detailed reviews, KL. He's quite something. :) And yes, I understand the correction now, thanks!

[Nusquam Esse]

And forever more... Nusquam was known as the 'detailed reviewer'. Well... time to change my name I guess?

[Blue]

What would you rather be, Nusquam? It's an honor denied to many.

[Baby Ricochet]

We all have our ways. I come up with stuff by counting syllables. That'a why most of what I write is an 8-6 count

[Lyn Anderson]

OMG another numbers person! I have so many little number quirks. Cool.

[NeiL ArandA]

This is heart warming and awesome write KLG. You are showing your romantic side again which I really like of you.

[Lyn Anderson]

well, some of it is romantic, kind of, and then there is marmalade and dead hearts ...:)

[NeiL ArandA]

KLG have you check and read one of my piece " No Name " . I wrote about the feeling of unrequited love...

[Lyn Anderson]

no, can you send a request?

[NeiL ArandA]

OK I will ...