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Exhale

Exhale

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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an old poem ..Exhale is used many times over the years for many titles of all kinds of things .. i think it retains its allure and power, however ... just my opinion

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Exhale


My craving wailed;     

(banshee on the wind)

     gripping 
             petals,

     misting
             reason.


Whispers trace kisses,
                         fragmenting my thoughts.


Untamed--
          love lured me

     crimson,
          and purple.

                                        exhale.....................
                                                              ........................
                                                                              ................................................................................



E.
© 2013 Einstein Noodle

© 2021 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
I read Seriana's poem "Exhale" https://www.writerscafe.org/writing/drushin703/2767099/#comment-4469383
and thought it would be fun to re-post mine .. they are so different in theme .. hope you like it .. let me know what you think Seriana! :)

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"Whispers trace kisses,
fragmenting my thoughts.
Untamed--
love lured me"...

And then..Wait for it....aaah, "exhale..................
Just so breathtaking (literally!) and sensual E. My heart added extra beats while reading. This is love as it should always be - teetering, suspended in the passion and heat of the moment before...just like your supremely expessive lines and perfect pauses...
Loved this hugely and thank you for pointing me to Seriana's poem as well my friend!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

you have made my day Annette! gave me a good feeling inside with your review .. yes .. we can get kn.. read more



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I love the haunting nature of this poem! For some reason, it reminds me of Angela Carter's The Bloody Chamber, like it could be pulled straight from that book, so, so good! x

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks L! i will have to check that out! have not heard of her .. and so nice to have your visit .. .. read more
I love the formatting of this poem, the way it forces you to read it with certain pauses. The "gripping petals" line is such a strong line, so much emotion from the word gripping contrasted with the softness of flower petals, the poem is just beautiful.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

thank you so much for your encouraging review .. i am feeling very gratified that it spoke to you in.. read more
Wow! The imagery in this, the beautiful word usage... it creates and puts together such a gorgeous and amazing piece. There’s something about this poem that all ties it together perfectly, it just fits. Crimson and purple, the banshee, everything. As I was reading, you created imagery so strong in my head, I had to go back to check if the poem was written differently, but no. You didn’t need overly tenuous details and long exaggerated descriptions, you just wrote what you felt and made us all see it. The exhale is so refreshing too, almost as if the poem is reminding you to breathe, which is like the cherry on top to the sundae of this amazing poem. Such a smooth and well flowing piece, I could go on and on, but then this review would be very, very long! So I’ll finish with, yes, exhale does still retain its allure and power, and it’ll only grow stronger!

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

oh my Colacat! thank you so much for your kind and generous review ... couldn't be more happy to rec.. read more
Colacat

1 Month Ago

It was my pleasure! :)
Many things can lure us for good or bad . I guess magnetism is so powerful and built in our genes; the positive and the negative, the 2 polar opposites. Yours is explained in beautiful, romantic terms. Long live Gene and the genes of love...

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

ahahahaha .. and a long and prosperous life to you good friend .. thanks for reading and commenting .. read more
Sami Khalil

1 Month Ago

Peace, love and harmony. Be blessed. You are welcome Einstein ...
Untamed- love lured me. OHH i liked this!! Beautifully written Einstein Noodle.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

thanks Mads! I appreciate your visit. So nice to meet a new person .. right here at the Cafe' .. pea.. read more
Indeed, craving will raise a racket in its attempts to be satisfied. And yes, reason does often go out the window in the face of such. If this particular craving is what it appears to be, it confirms what I have always suspected: Both figuratively and literally, women have got us by the balls.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

ahahaha you read this one loud and clear my friend..and i agree...they surely do ..but we love it ju.. read more
Very descriptive write and poetically penned, Einstein Noodle. "Whispers trace kisses " is a lovely line.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

i confess my friend .. that line you mention is an important one for me .. thanks for the visits alw.. read more
"Whispers trace kisses,
fragmenting my thoughts.
Untamed--
love lured me"...

And then..Wait for it....aaah, "exhale..................
Just so breathtaking (literally!) and sensual E. My heart added extra beats while reading. This is love as it should always be - teetering, suspended in the passion and heat of the moment before...just like your supremely expessive lines and perfect pauses...
Loved this hugely and thank you for pointing me to Seriana's poem as well my friend!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

you have made my day Annette! gave me a good feeling inside with your review .. yes .. we can get kn.. read more
While I love the words...I really like the use of the ellipses/dots. IT does feel like an exhalation. Sometimes we have to do that when we are in love...just breathe. I also like the interesting juxtaposition between love and reason- sometimes these forces are opposed.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

they certainly are my friend ... love flames and the mind goes out the window ;))))))))))) thank you.. read more
Amazing and beautiful words shared my friend. The words danced to meaningful and understandable thoughts. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

your a good friend here John .. thank you for all your kindnesses ... glad you enjoyed :)
E.
Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

I did enjoy my friend and you are welcome. I hope you are doing well and staying safe.
Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

yep! for the last week and a half we have a steady 4 active cases in my County (which is sparsely po.. read more

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