Majestic

Majestic

A Chapter by Wondering Mind

 

Majestic is your love to me;
                 A Queen, you conquered my heart.
With all my will I surrendered
                    And vowed we’ll never part
 
You outshined the little stars
                      Brighter than a royal moon
And dominated my skies
                      Like the desert sun at noon
 
Loyal is your noble heart
                     To no other did it sway
And only to my tides
                Have your shores been a bay
 
Your love roots deep within
                      Patient like a date-palm tree
And in your Garden of Eden
                     My soul rejoices free


© 2010 Wondering Mind


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"Loyal is your noble heart/To no other did it sway/And only to my tides/ Have your shores been a bay"

These lines really stook out to me. They're so truthful and show how much the other person cares for you in order not to "sway" as you said. Because now-a-days, it seems that most people don't really care for 'love' anymore, they just want marriage or a relationship.

Great piece!

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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I liked the rhyme and the rhythm. Nice, sweet poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Musical in it's read. Love rhymes. And love poems about exclusive devotion. Bravo!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Lovely work here. Bright and passionate, lovingly and compassionate. Good job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Very tender write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


A beautiful and melodic piece. I love it!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Such is the beauty in love song. To swoon within these quatrains that use line breaks and pauses quite effectively is pure - - - - magic. Excellent poetry. I enjoyed this so very much. Thank you . ~Pamela

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ah! This is so breath takingly beautiful, I like your write it's truthful....Kim

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a beautiful piece!
I love how it connects the beauty of love to beauty of nature.
I really enjoyed reading this piece. It's so pretty. Wow.
This is breath taking and the rhyme is flawless.
Excellent work!
-E.M.R

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful tribute to the one you love, so romantic .....found it breathtaking and such a pleasure to read. Adding it to my favorites. PW

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

"Loyal is your noble heart/To no other did it sway/And only to my tides/ Have your shores been a bay"

These lines really stook out to me. They're so truthful and show how much the other person cares for you in order not to "sway" as you said. Because now-a-days, it seems that most people don't really care for 'love' anymore, they just want marriage or a relationship.

Great piece!

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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