Majestic

 

Majestic is your love to me;

                 A Queen, you conquered my heart.

With all my will I surrendered

                    And vowed we’ll never part

 

You outshined the little stars

                      Brighter than a royal moon

And dominated my skies

                      Like the desert sun at noon

 

Loyal is your noble heart

                     To no other did it sway

And only to my tides

                Have your shores been a bay

 

Your love roots deep within

                      Patient like a date-palm tree

And in your Garden of Eden

                     My soul rejoices free

Reviews

[Daniel]

"Loyal is your noble heart/To no other did it sway/And only to my tides/ Have your shores been a bay"

These lines really stook out to me. They're so truthful and show how much the other person cares for you in order not to "sway" as you said. Because now-a-days, it seems that most people don't really care for 'love' anymore, they just want marriage or a relationship.

Great piece!

[Champagne]

I liked the rhyme and the rhythm. Nice, sweet poem.

[JelliFyshKissUs]

Musical in it's read. Love rhymes. And love poems about exclusive devotion. Bravo!

[MuSe Ampoule]

Lovely work here. Bright and passionate, lovingly and compassionate. Good job!

[Marie Harrison]

Very tender write.

[Lilly]

A beautiful and melodic piece. I love it!

[Pamela A. Lamppa]

Such is the beauty in love song. To swoon within these quatrains that use line breaks and pauses quite effectively is pure - - - - magic. Excellent poetry. I enjoyed this so very much. Thank you . ~Pamela

[darkgurl]

Ah! This is so breath takingly beautiful, I like your write it's truthful....Kim

[Last Lying Look]

This is a beautiful piece!
I love how it connects the beauty of love to beauty of nature.
I really enjoyed reading this piece. It's so pretty. Wow.
This is breath taking and the rhyme is flawless.
Excellent work!
-E.M.R

[Angel Baby]

Beautiful tribute to the one you love, so romantic .....found it breathtaking and such a pleasure to read. Adding it to my favorites. PW