An Epitome of Sadness

An Epitome of Sadness

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Random scribbles. Spontaneous write.

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An Epitome of Sadness  

I would hold you there, quietly,
silent. And yet, you'll slither
around the edges (still).

I would hold you there,
between the maroonish blues
of my lips, slightly parted.

While you sleep, my
mind weaves and
weaves images and I,
ever coward, run a shaking
hand over my eyes,

as if momentary relief
of not seeing has anything
to do with avoiding what's
yet to come...

but I would hold you there, quietly, 
silent, in the topmost 
shelf of my heart (reserved
for you) until it swells;

I, an epitome
of sadness (still).


© 2018 Dr. YumnaKay


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oh my!!!!! well done Doc!!! i am slowly roped, weighted and drown ... the sad melancholy scene is well captured ... the "knowing" ... "holding on" ... and the inevitable all add up to "An Epitome of Sadness" ... and done spontaneously!!!!! i think this is a special keeper my friend .. pure inspiration!! well done!
E.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

11 Months Ago

blimey.. you get younger every day.. take care in that heat brother.. N
Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

ahahahahaha yes!!!!!! i'll go along with that!!!!! 40s it is today ;)))))))))))))))))))
Neville

11 Months Ago

Yeah.. 40 it is then.. for one day only eh..



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I quite like this, Doc. The style draws me in...the kind of writing that works best with a glass of wine in front of a fire, quietly reading...petting the dog and letting the words work their way through the evening.

A good write.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely words and for appreciating, Ted. Glad it made you feel this way :).. read more
Sometimes nuanced writing is so opaque to me, I can't tell what the poet is conveying, even if well-crafted words still conjure up something good inside me as I read. This is some of your most nuanced writing I've read & yet I totally understand what you mean, even when you don't come right out & say it. The hesitance, the timidity, the dancing around a thing is part of your message . . . you express only a nuance, a hint of a thing becuz you leave the possibilities dancing out there for us to pick up on or not. This is my favorite kind of nuanced writing (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

I usually don't go for complicated write ups and tend to make them simpler, except for the lay outs,.. read more
barleygirl

3 Months Ago

I often do not see my own stuff clearly until other people have made comments . . .
haunting, beautifully, profoundly, sadly and sensually haunting, You always darw the emotions as deep, real and true as they must be, make us live each moments of Yours as real as it is, totally magnificent!

Posted 9 Months Ago


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Light

9 Months Ago

"emotions are not really what I work best with"?!? oh believe me You work the BEST with ^‿^
Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Ah, you're too kind. I might believe it one day ;) :P
Light

9 Months Ago

You must believe it, it's true.
Great poem Dr Yumnakay. hits the sadness spot on.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating, Dawn. Hope you've been well. x
Dawn

11 Months Ago

My pleasure Dr. Yunmakay. Not to bad thanks. Hope your good too. x
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b.
this beautifully paints a vivid portrait of those times when sorrow becomes an uninvited guest that makes itself too comfortable for the soul.

fantastic use of metaphoric sensitivity you’ve incorporated that just lingers...not to mention the
pleasing fluidity you weaved
throughout this poetic gem

~ thank you for the read ~ x


Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much for the lovely words, ms. barrie. Glad you appreciate x
b.

11 Months Ago

you’re welcome, was a pleasure :)
oh my!!!!! well done Doc!!! i am slowly roped, weighted and drown ... the sad melancholy scene is well captured ... the "knowing" ... "holding on" ... and the inevitable all add up to "An Epitome of Sadness" ... and done spontaneously!!!!! i think this is a special keeper my friend .. pure inspiration!! well done!
E.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

11 Months Ago

blimey.. you get younger every day.. take care in that heat brother.. N
Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

ahahahahaha yes!!!!!! i'll go along with that!!!!! 40s it is today ;)))))))))))))))))))
Neville

11 Months Ago

Yeah.. 40 it is then.. for one day only eh..
Wow this is simply wonderful... A somber and almost peaceful write.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely words, Kesha. Glad to have you around :))
This has a haunting sweetness and sadness, as though love is a duty while the mind searches and returns unsatisfied. Sometimes we are there, but not there, captured but not captivated.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

You do capture the feeling here. Thank you so much for your words, Jibey. Always appreciated.
with time sadness shall pass

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your words here and for reading.

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