Breathe

Hehe, Ummm... please don't hate me for this

Author's Note

I actually wrote this after I touched my neck to feel my pulse, don't know why I do that so often, but it's just something I do outta habit.
Tell me what y'all think about this poem!! I'm sure I'm going to love hearing y'alls interpretations of this.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my .. brave to focus on such a topic .. as I read I followed the instructions .. breath in ... breath out... it starts out to be romantic or an invitation to know someone more intimately ... in a positive way .. creative and sexual tension builds as the pressure does .. to close in revelation of pain and some hidden desire for self destruction ... well done says i ... the progression builds with each breath .. I like it! well done! important issues start to finish says i! ... a very worthwhile poem ma'am.
E.
ps. Happy Valentines Day Nix .. wishing you well and safe :)

[Nix is typing...]

I love this review, Einstein Noodle! It's so insightful!
Happy Valentine's Day to you, too!! :)))

[Haley]

This was an amazing read, one that I clung onto every word and wished there was more. Great use of repetition, I too was holding my breath! Really great job!

[Nix is typing...]

I'm so glad I got that kinda reaction from you!! I tried to make it captivating!! :))) When I showed it to Ts (My main collaborater) he said it read kinda like auto-erotic asphyxiation. Which it kinda does, but I mean, I never really had that intent when I was writing it. My first write of it, I put "I" instead of "you"
"Letting you know I’m still alive"
At first, that was "Letting myself know I'm still alive"
but then I changed it so it sounded like someone else was doing it to me. Just to give it a little bit more of a kick. Thank you so much for your read and review and reaction. It brought a smile to my face :)))

[Haley]

Haha that's a great thought to jump to when reading this. It could also be read that way, it feels more personal than it does sexy to me, but of course it also depends on what state the reader is in to! Really great job, as always!

[Nix is typing...]

Thank you so much, Haley!! :)))))

[duff]

Streets and avenues to explore. Intense at times building to the possible end or a continuation of mysterious followings. Nice work.

[Nix is typing...]

Thank you so very much for your read and review, Duff :))))

[AJNJ]

Wow. This was such a mind blowing read. I forgot to breathe and now breathing in short rasps! You have one hell of a poem here!

[Nix is typing...]

I love this review, AJ!!! I'm so glad my writing could incite such a reaction!!! That's what it was intended to do anyway. :)))) You have no idea how happy you just made me!!!
Thank you so much for your read and review!!!!!!!

[John the Baptist]

I was glad to find it was you in the end. For a while, I thought it was the Boston Strangler.

[Coyote Poetry]

Very nice use of words and thoughts dear poet.
"The questions beg
“What do I need saving from?”
Myself
Breathe out..."
I liked the personal feel of the words. Saving who? A interesting question. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Nix is typing...]

I love your reviews, Coyote! I don't know why, but I always feel so special whenever I read one of your reviews on my works!!!
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

It is my pleasure and you are welcome my dear friend.

[Dave Brown]

i think you better make close friends with a nurse
just sayin

[Nix is typing...]

Hehe, thanks Dave, but I'm not really into auto-erotic asphyxiation, I guess that's what this poem reads as.🤨
I wasn't exactly going for that, though, but I wasn't really going for anything with this poem, just the phrase, "Breathe in, breathe out" has been floating around in my head for a while and I've been wanting to put it in a poem, and I couldn't think of anything happy and upbeat, so when I checked my pulse the other day, this popped in my head, and I hated my brain for it. But I had to get it out immediately. So I wrote it down (typed it in google docs) and this is where it ended up. Thanks for the read and review, though! :)

[Dave Brown]

Funny how things rattle around in the head
Take care

[Kari Rakitan]

You've brought a very impressive level of detail to your experiences. I haven't been through anything similar, but I can almost imagine it.

[Nix is typing...]

I'm glad I could get you to be able to almost imagine being in this situation, I tried to make it intense. Thank you so much for your read and review!!

[poetgurl]

Wow, Nix this is powerful, i like the way you draw the reader in with your visual sense.

[Nix is typing...]

Thank you, Kari!! :)
I've actually had the words "Breathe in, Breathe out" floating around in my head for awhile and I haven't had a clue how to shove 'em in one of my poems. So the other day, when I touched my fingers to my neck to check my pulse, this popped in my head. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the read and review, Kari!!!
Oh, and I wish you could send me read requests! :) I really like reading your work and sometimes I miss the new ones you post! (Because you're posting so fast)

[Relic]

I've read this type of writing on another site. Some will consider it BDSM which I never understood but it is popular with a certain crowd.

[Nix is typing...]

Ha, thanks for the observation, Relic. I actually had to look that up. I'm not...um...exactly a BDSM kinda person. The phrase "Breathe in, breathe out" has been floating around in my head for a while and I had no idea how to stick it in one of my poems. Then one night, I touched my fingers to my neck to feel my pulse, and this popped in my head. Don't know why, but I needed to get it out of my brain immediately, so I wrote it. Thanks for the read and review, though! :)