Starlings

My first ever attempt at a Haiku

Starling birds take flight

The warm winter sun shines bright

Filling me with light

Author's Note

So...yesterday, when my dad and I got home from the gym, I found a bird in our yard, its left-wing seemed to be broken, it couldn't fly. So we took it inside, put it in a big box with some birdseed and water, made a little nest outta pine straw found in the yard, and we're keeping it until its wing gets better (Don't worry, I've done this before). It turned out to be a starling. So I named it Silver (Starling Silver). And it inspired this haiku outta me. :) I’ve always said that I could never even attempt a haiku...that too many words ran through this plethora of thoughts in my head...here is my first attempt at it...tell me how I did?
THANK YOU FOR READING!!! 😄

Reviews

[Franky]

Woe. Im way more impressed with how you helped that poor bird. 👍👍
.how incredibly sweet of you.

[Nix is typing...]

Thank you for reading and reviewing!!! We took care of that bird as much as we could, but the moment we let it outside, it jumped outta the box and ran. We fed and sheltered it for a few days but in the end, its natures turn with it...

[Einstein Noodle]

i love your haiku .. it fits the form perfectly and you have added another dimension of rhyme to it ... your personal touch .. i love it ... i am more of a crows and ravens man me self ... but starlings are darlings aren't they ;) too cool to learn that you are precticed in the art of wing mending Nix ..i think that's pretty divine ma'am ... and you and your Da go to the gym together .. wow! I'm lucky to get a call from my kids .. God bless you :))))))) your haiku is uplifting .. love the action, scene and spiritual reflection in closing line ... nice one says i! and thanks for sharing the background story as well!
E.

[Ziggy Matthews]

Much better than my first attempt at haiku. I love the backstory you shared as well. I like the words "Warm winter sun." I don't tend to associate warm and winter together. However, the sun is the only warm thing in the winter. It gives off a very peaceful and optimistic feeling, and I think these words help with that. Great job!!!

[Nix is typing...]

Well, Ziggy, we don't get much snow down in North Georgia, so winter/fall is basically probably like summers in Nebraska...(I've never actually been to Nebraska, but I heard it was snowy this winter) so the warm winter sun combined with the cool breeze made for a pretty nice winter. :) I'm glad my little haiku made you feel an emotion :) (uh...a positive emotion, that is, lol) Thanks so much for the read and review, Ziggy!! It's much appreciated!!!! :)

[Just Kim]

This is very wonderful, nicely written

[Nix is typing...]

Thank you, Kim!!! :)

[Ted Kniffen]

Well done Nix ... these are not easy to write. You did good.
I think it is good for a poet to experiment with different formats ... not all will work, but it is good to try.

My yard is filled with starlings at the moment.

Keep safe ... keep writing.

[Nix is typing...]

I love starlings so much, the shapes they make in the sky are so cool! Thanks for the read and review, Mr. Ted! It's highly appreciated!!!

[barleygirl]

Excellent first attempt & even with rhyming! Nicely expressed thru imagery (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Nix is typing...]

Thank you, Miss Margie :) Your read and review are much appreciated here!

[Dave Brown]

You did fine with the haiku but as good as it is, much better with the Starling
Big bird is always watching

[Nix is typing...]

Thanks for the read and review, Dave :)