frosted coral kisses on the window

frosted coral kisses on the window

A Chapter by Lyn Anderson
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inspired by Shimmerbliss/CAF

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A worry line

firmly planted

between her brow,

(character, her mother

said it gave her)

 

The girl pressed her

frosted coral lips

against the car window,

to make a mark

in the shape of a kiss.

 

Might as well

make an impression

on its hard edge --

no one even knows

She exists ...

 

And the boy with a banjo

sits 'neath the willow,

strumming a song,

imagining the sound

of her voice --

 

The girl with the

beautiful round face,

and lips that match her toes --

the one who doesn't know

He exists.



© 2018 Lyn Anderson


Author's Note

Lyn Anderson
For some reason, the description comes up empty, so I put this here instead.
Inspired by Shimmerbliss/CAF
create a poem using coral, edge, toes, hard, worry, banjo, willow, car, round, sound


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It's like I'm there watching the moments unfold.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words, I wanted it to read like a story.
"I wanna know who you are when I'm not looking"... how often is it that the real you is hidden or as in your poem not seen in the existence of the other... sometimes like two ships passing in the night or in other cases, not knowing cause of not thinking you or they do not exist... the what ifs strum from the banjo and the song you embedded are well woven in how you used these words KL... the only "description" I might question would be how you used "hard edge" impression in that a window, unless broken in pieces is smooth and has no hard edge... but perhaps I misread and you were referring to those "coral lips"/kiss, since while beautifully colored, coral does have a hard edge...

I enjoyed reading your poem and the way it used these words... I think it is often difficult to do this type of poetry/challenge... ever do a "5 and dime" challenge (5 words in a 10 line poem)?? Also lots of fun to write...

redzone

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

No problem, and thank you for reading. I like to stretch to these challenges to make something that .. read more
redzone

4 Years Ago

I would italisize the word in the 5/10 challange... but i do see your point.. makes the poem to spec.. read more
Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

yes for sure. I know it is done for ease of seeing on the part of the person looking at the poem, bu.. read more
ah so there is always someone who knows we exist...even if we are not sure we do, ourselves.

i bet there is evidence on that car window...and in the sound of the song he is playing on that banjo...

j.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thanks. I enjoy these word challenges, although I am having a little more challenge with one of the .. read more
It seems there is an invisibility in life. Yet color draws attention and a song seems to find an ear eventually.
I enjoyed seeing both characters here.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thank you. I find these word challenges wonderful to try and build a story around them -- yet I trie.. read more
I loved this. We should open our eyes more eh?
I love this song and Blake Shelton.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

Who'd a thunk it? Still got some sap in me somewhere huh?
Matching Socks

4 Years Ago

Yeah, sap is a sweet thing ain't it?
Wow! You are amazing! It absolutely thrills my heart to think you were inspired to write this by my little "Nowhere"! Love, love, love this video and it really takes me somewhere...I love the idea in it.

You have aced using the words for the contest...completely unforced and beautiful. A soft, and dreamy message like the song. Hope they find each other!
Really, you have so much talent. Can't even say enough "Sis" :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thanks, couldn't have done it without you.
Shimmerbliss/CAF

4 Years Ago

To have played a part is an honor. You are such an amazing talent. I learn from you...truly.
Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I appreciate it.

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Added on May 16, 2016
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Tags: coral, edge, toes, hard, worry, banjo, willow, car, round, sound


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Lyn Anderson
Lyn Anderson

Toronto, Ontario, Canada



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