...while you sleep

...while you sleep

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Spontaneous. Doubts (?)

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I wonder 

if I am (still)

 

the distant roar

that travels shyly

past your ears

 

while you sleep. 



 

 



© 2019 Dr. YumnaKay


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Hmm this is something that a lot of people who are romantically involved wonder. What do they think of us? and I often wonder this too. But dont worry, im quite sure that the person you question in the poem dreams of you too... and probably mutters your name in their sleep XD haha. I liked this poem a lot, fp :P

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

That's nice being reassured ;P Your words here made me smile. Thank you so much for reading and appr.. read more



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I can think of only two people in my life where I was thinking of him when I went to sleep & I was thinking of him when I awoke. Your poem paints the night passion connecting these two dream endpoints! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 10 Months Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

Glad this poem reminded you of someone ;) thank you so much for reading, BG. Appreciated, as always... read more
Sigh this evokes so many feels.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I'm glad it made you feel something. Thank you so much for reading, Aurora :)
A pithy, simply moving capture of our wandering minds. And, yes, the sound remains in the midst of the silence.

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your words here, Jibey. Always appreciated.
Hmm this is something that a lot of people who are romantically involved wonder. What do they think of us? and I often wonder this too. But dont worry, im quite sure that the person you question in the poem dreams of you too... and probably mutters your name in their sleep XD haha. I liked this poem a lot, fp :P

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

That's nice being reassured ;P Your words here made me smile. Thank you so much for reading and appr.. read more
my imagination took me to this place...the person is in the afterlife wondering if he or she is still remembered, still heard even if no longer seen, physically...
a memory in the ear....the sound of friendship ....a calming roar.
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I like how you take this piece, better than how I made it out to be. Thank you so much for your word.. read more
Perfectly perfect Dr Y. The number of times those doubts can trouble us. Brevity which says much and leaves little to the imagination. Love the way you have conveyed those feelings.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

They do often trouble me, though I'm told that they're unnecessary...
I appreciate your word.. read more
Nicely done, Doc. A lovely bit that resonates on many levels...doubt...love...caring.
Not sure the parentheses around 'still' are necessary.

All in all a great bit of writing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Oh, I used the parenthesis to signify the quiet, doubtful voice in my head. I'm glad you like it. Th.. read more
Such a beautiful, if whimsical short piece filled with wonder and yearning after more what ifs. You capture it is a short piece of well chosen words whose spft tones give elegance and purpose to the reader.

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely words here, John. Glad you appreciate.

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