Promise Me

Promise Me

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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In Response to Vanessa's (Βανέσα) poem "Being" Inspired....

"
If you promise 
never 

To leave 
my side 

Sharing
 
with me 
the burden 

of my 
broken shoulders 


If you promise 
never 

To leave 
my side 

Until the night's 
ascending 

Into a new dawn 


If you promise 
never 
 
To leave 
my side 
 
In this 
whole world of 

miseries 



Then 
 
I would 
Let you 

Be.


© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay


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' f you promise ~ never ~ To leave ~ my side ~
Sharing .. '

Tis hard to leave someone's side when promises have been made somewhere else. Who's ever to know. There's both sadness and hope in this.. sometimes the two don't walk hand in hand.

A superb post, a very rational yet sensvtive way of being that not everyone has and some are too blind to accept.. .

(please forgive my typos. so very careless)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

I'd say promises are harder kept but made easily enough...
Thank you for appreciating, Em. T.. read more



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I might be too jaded to see your msg in a hopeful light. To me, this sounds like a puzzle where one runs into the same head-knocker no matter which door is taken. Promising to never leave someone's side is pure folly in my book. There are so many ways life cannot be predicted or controlled. In effect, I'm reading your poem as a warning that nobody will ever be allowed in, since the premise of constant companionship is impossible to fulfill. Your poem feels like the ultimate irony, but it might just be me! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 5 Months Ago


Yet, these promises are really kept.
But wow! You've a talent to pen down those sentiments!
Great!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

*groan* yeah true that. Nothing is easy really
Ghania

2 Years Ago

Ha ha Ha. Best of luck. :)
Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

You too, my friend (;
' f you promise ~ never ~ To leave ~ my side ~
Sharing .. '

Tis hard to leave someone's side when promises have been made somewhere else. Who's ever to know. There's both sadness and hope in this.. sometimes the two don't walk hand in hand.

A superb post, a very rational yet sensvtive way of being that not everyone has and some are too blind to accept.. .

(please forgive my typos. so very careless)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

I'd say promises are harder kept but made easily enough...
Thank you for appreciating, Em. T.. read more
promises only most will be broken and the few will be forgotten, the rest? Those have true value

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

So there would still be promises left even after them being forgotten and broken? Seems unlikely..
This is amazing!! Wow... seriously Yumna! This is really well worded, the words flow really well, no forced words...
I like this a lot!
Keep it up!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Shaan! This really was a response to a fellow writer's poem, so no brilliance on my part .. read more
Promise me it self is a beautiful title and would love to write on this topic very much,,,,,,,,,,so glad of reading your poem and it gave me the greatest gift of idea to do something special,,,,,,

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

I'm glad it gave you the inspiration to write. Thank you for your kind words and thoughts 😊
I like this: sincere, simplistic, sweet. I.I.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Isabella! You're very kind. I appreciate your words 😊
Isabella Ivy

2 Years Ago

Thank you! You as well :)
one stone at a time, pile of promises, you will remain strong.. lovely style .. write on..

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

I agree! Thank you! I'm glad you like it 😊
Kind, hopeful and gentle words and questions. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to proper ending. Thank you dear poet for sharing your amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Coyote! Your appreciation means a lot to me 😊
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

I love your work and you are welcome.
WOW that is incredible. Just truly a work of art

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Thank you! I'm glad you like it 😊

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