When Metaphors Are Dead

When Metaphors Are Dead

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Inspired by Jacob erin-cilberto's poem 'when format is all we have'.

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When metaphors are dead 


with no songbirds in sight 
to lighten the morn' of a 
scorching October day, 

and not even the water 
trickling down the fingers 
has that desired effect.

When thoughts and emotions 
get muddled like a cat 
running wild with a half-finished
patchwork quilt.

Still, words spill themselves, 
erratic, as we stroke our egos,
euphoric, that we have penned 
something brilliant...


awaiting to be read. 


© 2018 Dr. YumnaKay


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Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
The last few lines are directed at self than on anyone else. Thank you for reading.

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Your words create such an October place, with a stillness, with a lingering warmth from summer still sliding over your tongue. One can feel the creative seed coming to life in you, the joy as each word is born into another. I always find myself awaiting the reading of more of you, dear Yumna.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating this one, Craig. The feeling's mutual, my friend. x



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It is my belief that all writers are steeped in the euphoria of a newly-finished piece, stroking our egos & such (excellent observations well stated). So it's not just you! *wink! wink!* I could not find Jacob's poem, but I know his style well & I can feel it in your poem, the way he is self-deprecating about his writing abilities. I love how you use metaphor so imaginatively despite your title, the ultimate in irony (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

I think I became too self critical of my stuff after I somewhat got the hang of how to express mysel.. read more
so where is the metaphor Doc??? (just kidding) your title is a well baited hook ...especially for around here ..or any poet place as far as that goes ... not surprised the wiz of metaphor, Mr. jacob has been the inspiration ... the poet searches and finds phrases, images, and struggles like half planted seeds ;) and your note on the closing, in my opinion , is not needed ... we ought to be able to smile at ourselves over the mix of muse, words and "I" ... can't tell you how many times an idea and a few words have burst upon my wandering mind ..to be jotted down in haste so as not to loose the brilliance ... the piece of paper usually travels around in me pocket for days until i "discover" it and read it ..and wonder (honestly) what i ever saw in it ;} love your poem .. one of the best, I have read, about when the ink runs dry
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I definitely suck at metaphors so Jacob and the poets here are certainly an inspiration for me (that.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

its a keeper says i!
another gem doc, this is a joy to read too, twice now!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

That humbles me. Thank you so much, once again :D
I think when you try to be creative it never happens.
Then one line appears and the page is full.
Then you look at it thinking. Did I do that? wow.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Does happen with me either way, tbh, although I try to delude myself into thinking that I am a write.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

*doesn't. :x
Love the way you've created a poem highlighting the use of metaphors, and, so wonderful they are. The entire post is hung with them like a frost covered tree. You really are a magickal writer, dear friend. Brava and more.. you have indeed created something brilliant. .

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Your words here made me smile. Thank you so much for appreciating, Em. x
[[omfg yes I found you! It's nerissa (sinbulvinter), remember me?!]]

Your poetry is amazing as always. Thought provoking, beautiful, somewhat haunting.

"When thoughts and emotions
get muddled like a cat
running wild with a half-finished
patchwork quilt."
The imagery and metaphor here is wonderful.

"Still, words spill themselves,"
omg, can relate!
I love the idea of words "spilling" themselves. What a way to look at it!

Awesome.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kerdiwen Glass

1 Year Ago

I disappeared months ago, a whole bunch of s**t went down... I gotta tell you about it sometime, the.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Would love to catch up whenever you're free :-)
Haha okay, I'll be reading on anyway 😎�.. read more
Kerdiwen Glass

1 Year Ago

Yeah, actually Ill PM you
One of your best pieces... reflective, atmospheric, insightful. Metaphors are alive (!) - the songbirds, the water, the cat, the quilt. A pleasing spillage.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

But mainly inspired, so I can't take credit for this one on the whole :x
Thank you so much fo.. read more
I didn't see this one coming, till it smacked me in the face.. tis a super special little poetic work in its own write dear friend and poet... however.. ya gotta thank Jacob too for providing that initial spark of inspiration aint ya now....... Neville

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I can't really thank him enough or any of the writers here who help me learn and grow. I'm always hu.. read more
Neville

1 Year Ago

it is always a pleasure & so bloomin true.. I would not leave a comment if I did not like what I fou.. read more
We are writing new myths. Takes a bit of ego. I still think it would be fun for a bunch of us to sneak into one of jacob"s classes!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

A bit of an ego ain't bad, unless it gets our head swollen. lol.
Absolutely! I'd love to be .. read more
i can't fathom the thought of metaphors being dead....there would have to be a resurrection ....
we can't live without them...and poets would be so lost.
I really like this one...i am already giving blood at the poets' word bank so that we can save as many as possible.
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Aye, aye. I keep pondering over your and many other writers here for inspiration. I know I'd be lost.. read more

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