Promise Me

Promise Me

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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In Response to Vanessa's (Βανέσα) poem "Being" Inspired....

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If you promise 
never 

To leave 
my side 

Sharing
 
with me 
the burden 

of my 
broken shoulders 


If you promise 
never 

To leave 
my side 

Until the night's 
ascending 

Into a new dawn 


If you promise 
never 
 
To leave 
my side 
 
In this 
whole world of 

miseries 



Then 
 
I would 
Let you 

Be.



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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Keeping promises is considered a measure of one’s worth; we prize being “as good as our word”. However, when I read your composition, with the long breathes between each stanza, suggests we have so many out-of-awareness thoughts and feelings, we may not “know” of our unconscious ambivalence about a stated commitment. Can we trust a promise made … I assume we must!
Great write.


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Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

That's a brilliant observation! This poem was written in response to a fellow writer's poem. If you .. read more



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i really liked this piece, i thought it was beautiful

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Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Good for you! Enjoy your moments of relaxation, Kesha 😊💜
Kesha

7 Months Ago

I will, thank you Yumna :)
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Always welcome 😘
I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing. :)

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Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you for the appreciation. It really means a lot to me. 😇
Snow Angel

7 Months Ago

My pleasure :)
This is quite a response and I like it very much. An answer to the questions I displayed in my poem but I feel there's an almost demanding attitude in yours. It also makes me think of the giving and taking concept or images of puzzle like pieces maybe fitting shards or something. I always think pretty visually, sorry for my weird ideas..
You took over the style quite well too. I'm glad I could be an inspiration, always a good feeling to stir or provoke other people's creativity.
Thank you for sharing.

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7 Months Ago

I didn't say that ;) Of course you can't... Yes better or wiser as in knowing how to deal with peopl.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

And with each day, I learn more how people are not what they seem which of course adds to the bitter.. read more
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7 Months Ago

No unfortunately many aren't...
The working hours don't keep my restless mind from thinking, .. read more
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BBP
Gorgeous write ... It'd make a beautiful set of vows.

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Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Bev! Vows.. I never thought of that..
The influence of Vanessa's unique stylings are very evident here Yumna. It's quite an homage to her in my opinion but I'm sure also a great feeling for her, to see you adopt her style for this. So quid pro quo perhaps.
The deeper sentiments in this - supporting broken limbs for example - go far beyond the candy-coated friend pieces that we are used to seeing on WC.
Very well done my friend.
:)

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Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

I am quite inspired by her style of writing,Tony. And yes, I observed and copied her style so no bri.. read more
Tony Jordan

7 Months Ago

I too find her layout stylings inspiring.
I am just off to read Vanessa's poem now.
.. read more
Promises every loved one needed, though granted for some...
Well done Yumna..
Thank you for sharing..

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Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

I agree. Thank you so much. Much humbled by your kind words 😊
Keeping promises is considered a measure of one’s worth; we prize being “as good as our word”. However, when I read your composition, with the long breathes between each stanza, suggests we have so many out-of-awareness thoughts and feelings, we may not “know” of our unconscious ambivalence about a stated commitment. Can we trust a promise made … I assume we must!
Great write.


Posted 7 Months Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

That's a brilliant observation! This poem was written in response to a fellow writer's poem. If you .. read more
Expectations from our loved people . Very relatable. Very well penned, Yumnakay.


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Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you, Bala, for the kind words and appreciation. 😊
Bala Gorthi

7 Months Ago

You are welcome.
Wow, this speaks to me mi cherié. It gives off a more wistful vibe so many promises....either way it goes I liked it. Great job

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Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you, my friend! I'm glad you liked it. 😊
mmmm so many things we want them to promise...
isnt it... i can relate to these words quiet well...
simple yet sweet poem yumna...
but i guess promises are always meant to be broken.... some or the other day mostly by the ones you love and hold close to you..
what do you think

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Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

I would say it depends on the situations of that person too. Many a times, we don't want to break pr.. read more
Galadriel

7 Months Ago

mmmm :) ya maybe ... depends on who makes the promise and their intention behind it too...
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

True......

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