Promise Me

Promise Me

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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In Response to Vanessa's (Βανέσα) poem "Being" Inspired....

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If you promise 
never 

To leave 
my side 

Sharing
 
with me 
the burden 

of my 
broken shoulders 


If you promise 
never 

To leave 
my side 

Until the night's 
ascending 

Into a new dawn 


If you promise 
never 
 
To leave 
my side 
 
In this 
whole world of 

miseries 



Then 
 
I would 
Let you 

Be.



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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' f you promise ~ never ~ To leave ~ my side ~
Sharing .. '

Tis hard to leave someone's side when promises have been made somewhere else. Who's ever to know. There's both sadness and hope in this.. sometimes the two don't walk hand in hand.

A superb post, a very rational yet sensvtive way of being that not everyone has and some are too blind to accept.. .

(please forgive my typos. so very careless)

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Month Ago

I'd say promises are harder kept but made easily enough...
Thank you for appreciating, Em. T.. read more



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You write with such romantic thoughts but also in a spirit of hope. There is a charm in the simplicity of the structure and language of this, and a sense of possible contentment... if...

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

The style of writing isn't mine but yes thoughts are.
Thank you so much for your kind though.. read more
i love your way of writing.
your words have life in them,but in contemporary society, who is so sincere to keep a promise...just a few

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you, but this particular writing style is not mine. I just copied the style of a fellow writer.. read more
boygene borice

9 Months Ago

Welcome always. :)
i really liked this piece, i thought it was beautiful

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Good for you! Enjoy your moments of relaxation, Kesha 😊💜
Kesha

9 Months Ago

I will, thank you Yumna :)
Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Always welcome 😘
I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing. :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you for the appreciation. It really means a lot to me. 😇
Snow Angel

9 Months Ago

My pleasure :)
This is quite a response and I like it very much. An answer to the questions I displayed in my poem but I feel there's an almost demanding attitude in yours. It also makes me think of the giving and taking concept or images of puzzle like pieces maybe fitting shards or something. I always think pretty visually, sorry for my weird ideas..
You took over the style quite well too. I'm glad I could be an inspiration, always a good feeling to stir or provoke other people's creativity.
Thank you for sharing.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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9 Months Ago

I didn't say that ;) Of course you can't... Yes better or wiser as in knowing how to deal with peopl.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

And with each day, I learn more how people are not what they seem which of course adds to the bitter.. read more
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9 Months Ago

No unfortunately many aren't...
The working hours don't keep my restless mind from thinking, .. read more
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Gorgeous write ... It'd make a beautiful set of vows.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Bev! Vows.. I never thought of that..
The influence of Vanessa's unique stylings are very evident here Yumna. It's quite an homage to her in my opinion but I'm sure also a great feeling for her, to see you adopt her style for this. So quid pro quo perhaps.
The deeper sentiments in this - supporting broken limbs for example - go far beyond the candy-coated friend pieces that we are used to seeing on WC.
Very well done my friend.
:)

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

I am quite inspired by her style of writing,Tony. And yes, I observed and copied her style so no bri.. read more
Tony Jordan

9 Months Ago

I too find her layout stylings inspiring.
I am just off to read Vanessa's poem now.
.. read more
Promises every loved one needed, though granted for some...
Well done Yumna..
Thank you for sharing..

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

I agree. Thank you so much. Much humbled by your kind words 😊
Keeping promises is considered a measure of one’s worth; we prize being “as good as our word”. However, when I read your composition, with the long breathes between each stanza, suggests we have so many out-of-awareness thoughts and feelings, we may not “know” of our unconscious ambivalence about a stated commitment. Can we trust a promise made … I assume we must!
Great write.


Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

That's a brilliant observation! This poem was written in response to a fellow writer's poem. If you .. read more
Expectations from our loved people . Very relatable. Very well penned, Yumnakay.


Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Thank you, Bala, for the kind words and appreciation. 😊
Bala Gorthi

9 Months Ago

You are welcome.

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