Tangled Webs

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Tangled Webs

What are the odds

of capturing petalled dreams,

trapped between tangled 

webs of tomorrow;

we walk on parallel lines

of fate, which keep

lengthening,

beckoning us forward,

and our ever-eager souls

seek out where ends meet

into one...

what are the odds

of sleeping peacefully tonight,

yet another one spent 

aimlessly tossing around;

the winds stifle a laugh 

as they mark my skin.

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

What are the odds, that two people meant to be together will actually make it, or lose out again. There is a lot of angst here...a lot of what ifs...

Well written bit here, Doc and the last line is brilliant...with the right amount of ambiguity to throw a double entendre at the reader.

A good write.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad you felt that way, Ted. Thank you so much for your words here and for appreciating :)

[Bluebird]

I love the wording petaled dreams

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for reading. Glad you appreciate :)

[Robert Trakofler]

oh this feeling is so palpable in your write (I might add some of the yesterdays too) rear those ugly heads on my pillow as well! I meditate daily for this reason got to get my alpha waves in some form. Strangely enough this was my experience last night and wasn't very successful catching the waves in meditation today!!!! I guess we both will have to wait for our dreams:( (your parallel line... line made me a little dizzy i envisioned a tightrope walker)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I like that you envisioned it as tightrope walker 'cause that's actually how I imagine life to be too - and that's why not everyone excels at it...
Thank you so much for your thoughts here, BB. Truly appreciated.

[Wild Rose]

Parallel lines > keep on walking to where they meet
Forever walking
Like waiting for 'Tomorrow'

But tomorrow never comes there is always another 'Tomorrow' waiting there to beckon you on
Keep on walking towards 'Tomorrow' where the parallel line will meet

Possibly

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thanks so much for your words here, WR. Appreciated.

[Einstein Noodle]

i feel this Doc! i have no trouble falling to sleep but usually wake up around 2 AM and have learned that trying to go back to sleep for me then is not going to happen .. but tonight I am going to think of those parallel lines ... running off into infinity and see if i can make them meet ;} maybe in the effort ... i will fall asleep for another few hrs. :))) your poem has the nicest way of presenting the entanglements of time, ones plans and worries ...wrapped up in sticky webs ... of course you can't sleep !!! love those closing two lines ... so powerful yet subtle ... our efforts futile ... we resign ourselves .. but we are marked ... and have learned and will remember by the scar ;) absolutely loved reading and thinking about your poem ... your title drew me .. webs for poetry never gets old eh!?
E.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It works in phases for me, sometimes I can sleep upto 10 hrs and still feel sleepy lol and then there are days like lately where sleep simply evades me...
I like your thoughts here, Einstein. Thank you so much for appreciating. :)

[Chris Shaw]

Tossing and turning, no sleep here. Much to ponder on, I get the feeling of many unanswered questions causing a restless night. Your last two lines don't offer much hope that sleep will rescue you. Well written Dr Y.

Chris

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It is that way, unfortunately...thanks so much for your words here, Christine. Appreciated.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

tangled thoughts, tangled sheets, restless mind , winds on the conscience...yes, those parallel lines can cause insomnia...
and a restless heart.
nice work here,
j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

So they do, sadly...thank you so much for your words here and for liking, Jacob.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A get the vision of someone sleepless, tossing and turning as they try to get to grips with their feelings. I like the way you use the opening stanza to ask a question as it draws the reader. The whole peice feels sombre and sad and forlorn.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It was indeed written in that mindset...thanks so much for liking and reading, John. Appreciated.