Society

When i step out on the street,
A needle in the arm of a kid,
The cop takin the pay off,
The other one white nose,
Trigger happy, waitin to shoot someone.

The school, rich kid gets A+ for his parents pay the teacher.
Organized crime rules the world,
Every system is corrupt,
Governments, religions, schools,
Seventeen year old with a shotgun,
Shot his teacher, fifteen year old drinkin, and smokin weed.
Priests raping children,
Fake saints, and prophets roam the earth, spreadin their lies. Impossible to make any difference between the true and fake.
The name of god used to justify murder. Murderers set loose after less than ten years, drug dealers on the streets, prostitution, people bein sold. Wars rage everywhere, people losing their lives, homes, family friends. why?! god is dead. Nuclear threats, biohazards, people destroyin the earth. Fightin over oil, over land, and temporary power. Media full of violence. Where is god? the world turned completely dark, and gets darker every day. As globalization makes people think they're smarter...the dumber they get. The more rotten the world gets. So where is your jesus? where is your allah? where is your buddha? truth is its all peoples minds. Expectin someone else to clean up their mess. Humanity is evil the way it is.

Reviews

[Shawn]

Wow. Let me say that, first of all, I did enjoy this poem. I know this probably makes me into a murderer that has people locked up in his basement, but I did enjoy it, in a horror-film kind of way.

The view of the world in this short story is extremely morbid, but it is true. If you only consider the bad things in it.

I can also see the biblical aspects in this, with the world devolving into sin. Does this represent the apocalypse? Sorry if I'm coming off too Christian, it's how I was brought up and they're my beliefs.

Anyway, it was a really interesting read. Can I get a review on my book, it's not finished yet but I really need advice. Thanks!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

No problem :) what is the title of your book? and yeah, you got it right. I'm livin in a "christian" environment...so it did influence this write. Though i don't give a cent on the words of religions. No offense.

[Shawn]

Oh, that's fine. I'm not one of those people who get in people's faces when they don't want me to. It was a very good story though, I loved it!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :) though its not even close to the others... Anyways I'll continue readin your book tomorrow. Keep me updated when you add a chapter :)

[Ronnie]

completely true, I live in Iraq and see all things every day. and the truth is even uglier, thank you for posting.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks for readin :) and i believe these problems are world wide...only question is, how much do we see of it?

[AaronFreitas]

Some very harsh truths in this write... a world full ugly and dirty deeds. I loved it my friend. I love that you speak the truth to so many problems. Great work IM!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks for readin :)

[A writer]

Welcome to the jungle. Lol.
To get serious... Awesome write. A little darker than reality...but not too far from it. As for the cops...the first time I've seen someone smoke weed was when my neighbor(he's a police officer) went out to the garden...and enjoyed the ride to happiness.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Wow... Thank you. :)

[A writer]

Wow is right. Lol.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Yup... Lol.

[closed]

Prophetic literary style you used for this one

The reason so much of this stuff happens is because Lucifer is actually the one who controls the world itself

That's why the Amish refer to the earth as "the devil's playground"
It's biblical

But God himself allows the devil to manipulate the world because of the free will he gave mankind at the beginning of time

That won't fully make sense unless you are used to reading the bible alot
and studying it and such

Anyway

Good poem
And welcome back


-Dream

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you very much :)

[xbxbzdvdsv]

I love this so much!! I have to agree, Powerful piece, good job.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you!

[xbxbzdvdsv]

No problem (: