Redemption

Walkin down the street,
No...not waitin for a treat.
In this world...in here, in hell...
For this world,
There is only one word,
Burn.

God doesn't see,
The demon sea
Flooding the earth,
All evil,
Will burn the world.

Jesus died for you,
So go, leave while you can.
Leave me behind,
I'd just be unwanted weight.
For me there is no way,
But I've got no stay.

Just wandering the burnin sky,
Until my time will die.
When it dies,
My body flies,
Down the flames,
All judgement, blames...
I'll pay for all of it,
Even for yours.

No, i don't bring redemption,
All I've got is damnation.
But before you leave...
I'll be back.
Breakin down heaven,
Better watch your back,
When a familiar voice says "i live."

Broken wings,
Raged mind...things...
Things...that kill your mind,
No, i don't mind,
Just listen, and you'll find...
But i'm not sure will you like it,
When you find it.
My soul is ugly,
No doubts about it.

The heart used to beat,
But now its half cold, half heat.
It doesn't live.
No worries, i know your face,
I remember the ace.
I did not forget,
No, didn't regret.
Be ready...I'll pay the bill for you,
But I'll come back for whats mine.

God beware of your creation,
All you ever gave me was
Bloody damnation...
I'll return the favor.
Your time to burn.
For the devil...
Just burn.

Reviews

[AaronFreitas]

"God doesn't see,
The demon sea
Flooding the earth,
All evil,
Will burn the world."
I love those lines... really a dark and unique way of looking at things. I really enjoy the way you approached this... you didn't shy away from saying anything but spoke of things worth saying :) Good work IM!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you my friend.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

But really, god doesn't see the evil flooding the world... If there was a god, all this wouldn't be like it is now.

[AaronFreitas]

I can't speak for Him and what he see's.,, I hear both sides of the argument... He doesn't see whats going on if He does why not stop it... and the other side He see's how humans have failed and the Rapture is coming soon. Who really knows I can't agree or disagree there :)

[Olivia]

I love this piece so much. It's everything I want to say but can't, if that makes sense.
You're writing is so unique and powerful

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Oh...and thanks for subscribing :)

[A writer]

Wow. It hits me straight in the face! So much power. Awesome write. :) I love your work, but why is it that others don't review your work so often? I mean they do...but I've read poems that had a lot more feedback. Anyways, I love your work.

[prince digbani]

Wow, great poem.
In an imperfect world, ruled by imperfect beings, we all fear what would become of us when the perfect being comes to take his. We all pray to find mercy at his sight hoping to have an eternal bliss. Thanks for the share creativitylovescience. Thanks to you also for penning this brilliant work.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you very much.

[prince digbani]

You re welcome

[nazia]

Thanks to creativity loves pain for the RR else I would have missed such an amazing creation. every word written here makes me wonder and question a lot of beliefs. Great work :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you.

[closed]

this is as wickedly dark as it is bold
this is probably your best poem yet, hands down

it's a completely defiant stand against divinity, and life itself

this is the coldest poetic dagger i've seen implemented by anyone in awhile
and you have challenged heaven and hades themselves...

spine tingling
and spellbinding

-Dream

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you.

[Emily]

Nice wording!
Keep it up!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks for readin.

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Hmmm...I'm not a religious person. I don't believe in a place called heaven or hell. Perhaps they reside in our minds. God, may be a form of consciousness that samples "living" through us...shrugs. It's all a mystery and fascinating, IMO

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I don't believe in god or heaven...its all our imagination. Then why am i using these words? well...to demonstrate feelings.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Or more precisely the power of those feelings.

[xbxbzdvdsv]

I love this!! Such an amazing poem!! I hope you're proud of it, so creative!!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

So far you're the only one who reviewed it. Thanks for taking the time to read and review.

[xbxbzdvdsv]

Well i will send out read request! It is worth reading my friend! Thank you for sharing.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Sweet. Thank you!