Dark Soul

Dark Soul

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay

Your voice, 
 
was once 
my only 

salvation 
 
it carried 
a depth, 
a meaning, 
 
which none 
appeared to 
fathom 


Your eyes, 

were once 

the window 
to my soul, 
 
the view is 
blurred now, 
 
or maybe you're 
too far 
to notice, 
 
a soulless 
life here 
 

Your hands, 
 
I've forgotten 
their touch, 
 
the way 
they made me 
 
feel 
on fire, 
 
it has gone amiss 
 

My soul, 

it's darker 
than before 
 
I closed it 
shut 
 
not to be 
opened, 

at least, 
not for you



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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Ah..this is one sad yet sweet piece. Thought and content both are beautifully described here. Sometimes few events and experiences change our perception regarding few things in life...love too has the same impact..don't let the soul get darken by it. I know this is very easy to say but we need to survive. I hope this poem is not what you feel because if it is then this is really painful to read.
Nicely written:-)


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Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Well, it is close to what I felt at the time of writing.. But human emotions never remain the same.... read more



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Honest journey in words and thoughts. Sweetness can turn bitter when heart is abused. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

I agree, yes! Thank you for liking this one! I appreciate it ☺
Coyote Poetry

8 Months Ago

I did and you are welcome.
YumnaKay - this is not my cup of tea but that's neither here nor there. It is affecting. So you have made the reader feel.
I did think these two lines were the weakest part;
"aroused
that has gone amiss"
I think the previous line 'feel on fire' makes 'aroused' redundant.
Then the '...gone amiss..' line would be stronger with 'I miss that.'

All in all a great wee piece my friend.
:))

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

That's sweet of you! Still I'm my greatest critic 😉
Btw you don't have to understand ever.. read more
Tony Jordan

8 Months Ago

Haha - you thinkI understand any of the poetry on WC? Yayy - I have succeeded in fooling them all - .. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Hahah that's too bad 😛
I enjoyed the poem and the title really grabbed my attention but the extremely short lines threw me off at first.

Once I read it again though it had a better impact, with the concept of the Love in this poem seeming to flow at a delightfully brisk pace.

Keep it up, Kay! :0

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

The title was inspired by your pieces because I remembered I told you about your poetry being a bit .. read more
Lovecraft

8 Months Ago

I feel proud that I've inspired you. ;P
Embrace your darkness, whatever shade it may be.
Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Yes indeed dark is good 😉
And the pleasure was mine! I've been struggling a lot with titl.. read more
there was for sure some nice rhymes here, in particular "notice and soulless" was seriously butter.
I like how you resolved it with a strong stance for the end. Very nice!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Hey thank you! I didn't mean it to rhyme though.. I'm glad you liked this one :)

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Karachi, Sindh, Pakistan



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My writings reflect what I am, have been, and what I seek to be. Most of it is just ramblings in prose but occasionally I'll come up with poetry (if mood be). ~ We are not the same person we were .. more..

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