Till Death Do Us Apart

Till Death Do Us Apart

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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I suck at love poems :p

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I love you
I love you too

I miss these words
coming from you
while we didn't even look
at each other
when I would be looking at the sky 
searching for the brightest star
to ask what I wished the most
you
Only to find
you lookin' right at me 
'cause maybe you found it
in my very eyes
what you wished for
me
And we vowed
till death do us apart
and that it did 
you've been afar for too long
but like a constant ache
that never subsides
because
Pain demands to be felt
and that I feel
constantly reminding me
that maybe 
we would still have been together 
this valentine's day...


© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay


Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
I wanted this to be a valentine's day special.. Apparently didn't work lol

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There is no feeling that is sweeter than looking into someone's eyes and seeing a reflection of your own love there.
But somewhere along the road things go wrong and we are left with sorrow and regrets.
The pain of your words are so evident in this beautiful poem.
I wish you all the best for the coming Valentine's day.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Quite a perspective! I appreciate that..
TeeJae {TJ} Hart

2 Years Ago

Very much agree shabeeh
Shabeeh Haider

2 Years Ago

Thank you T J for agreeing



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You portray the feeling of an archetypal love very well. And the 'constant ache 'that comes when all does not go to plan. But, such is life. I enjoyed this well written poem.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Thank you for appreciating this old write. Glad you enjoyed 😊
This is a love letter and perfect for Valentine's Day. I found this charming, then sad, then glad that the writer had, at least, known great love. You took the reader from one extreme to the other. Cool.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Ah, tis one of my older writes which were written just as words and no real feeling, Carol. So at th.. read more
I wonder who the culprit behind this is... I wonderrrr...

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Nah.. There was none. These are again just words 😉
Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse (Y.A.D.)

2 Years Ago

Ahhhhhh, I see!
Pain demands to be felt..it is quite the motivator

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

It is.. Thank you! ☺
Lovely, poetic- a real treasure.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Thank you! Glad you liked it ☺
YumnaKay, I loved this beautiful prose poetry. Touching and vivid!
I loved the painful truth and the honest tone.
PS: I just felt the picture didn't go very well with the piece though. Otherwise great!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Hahah I feel so too! But I'm just too lazy to remove it lol
Thank you for liking Jyoti! Glad .. read more
Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

You are welcome! :)
"And we vowed
till death do us apart
and that it did
you've been afar for too long
but like a constant ache
that never subsides"

Beautifully described..Thanks for sharing..!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it ☺
I really liked it, it was quite heartwrenching, it's very sad to lose someone you loved. Nicely written

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

It is indeed! Thank you for liking this one as well! Means a lot ☺
Kesha

2 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
Those love poem can start sweet and end with words of a broken heart and wish. I like the powerful emotions leading to honest thoughts and a wish at the end. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Coyote, for feeling the emotions here! I truly appreciate your words ☺
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

You are welcome dear Poet.
Intensely bitter-sweet. The sentiments in the first half are pure romance and like life itself often does, it turned sour.
It takes on a life of it's own.
Well done - well purged - well expunged dear poet.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much, TJ! My emotions just got jumbled in this one..
Still, thank you for liking.. read more

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