fate ~ I dream

fate ~ I dream

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Experimental. I like being on the dreamy side every once in a while :P

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fate, I dream ~ of lover's mist

where desires float on feathery clouds
and the air around me feels solid; almost touchable.
I seek an oblivion so profound, where my being drowns
and the liquid tears no longer leave trails

of lover's mist ~ fate, I dream ...


© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay


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The misted mind of you creates a place just beyond this world, a place of profound beauty and deep joy only lover's can create as they melt into oneness. One seems to float across those sacred paths as you speak, truly hoping your feet are fated for their lightness.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely words, Craig. I appreciate it 😊



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A lover's mist. Safe and wonderful place to know. I liked the use of the language. Allowed the reader to feel the words. Perfect closing to the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much (:
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

You are welcome my friend.
Quite the ethereal piece YummaKay. Fantasies often put us in other worldly places. Lovers have the power to do that.

Nicely done.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Aye, they do indeed. Thank you so much for your lovely words, Tim. Glad you appreciate (:
The misted mind of you creates a place just beyond this world, a place of profound beauty and deep joy only lover's can create as they melt into oneness. One seems to float across those sacred paths as you speak, truly hoping your feet are fated for their lightness.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely words, Craig. I appreciate it 😊
Silky, dreamy words - as fluid as those tears for the most part.. .. yet stopping here and there as if thoughts trapped by uncertainty. Mayhaps?

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

An interesting conclusion and again very accurate. I'm nearly always uncertain and then thoughts com.. read more
Lovely.
Wistful feeling .

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Thank you for appreciating, Jon :)
very beautifully expressed....
nice alliteration...
j.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Ah, that alliteration was unintentional. Thank you for appreciating, Jacob :)
I like the structure , especially the neat reversal of the first and last lines. The misty lover's dream conveys the central thought well. The rhythm of lines 3-5 felt clumsy, especially line 3.

Can tears be other than liquid?

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Hm, I think line 3 is the most felt one here but I agree on the whole of this being rather a clumsy .. read more

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