Freaking Mentality

Freaking Mentality

A Chapter by Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)
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For the 10 words I Give Contest

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Do you wonder of this CORROSION 
We're like that of a HAMSTER union 
But the bind becomes FLIMSY like this ribbon 
Like a KIDNAPPER , grief has won 


HARVEST time that seems so near 
TURQUOISE waters speak that clear 
But FLICKER of hope is like dying ember 
As AVAILABLE space on a loaded shoulder 


Cast HOLY words like they can do magic 
But those envy CRABS  make this life so tragic 
You want to fly yet you carry their heavy rock 
You'll find out soon that you're falling back 


That mentality of a crab, so far, not gone 
Still here in our plate, we're still Masters of None!





© 2016 Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)


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Author's Note

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)
My observation. Wish this "crab mentality" will end soon.

The 10 Words:

C O R R O S I O N
H A M S T E R
F L I M S Y
K I D N A P P E R
H A R V E S T
T U R Q U O I S E
F L I C K E R
A V A I L A B L E
H O L Y
C R A B S

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Pax
"You want to fly yet you carry their heavy rock
You'll find out soon that you're falling back"

- I really like those lines, to which i am able to relate. I wish we could all say that we don't care what they said freely, but sometimes in the end, the fragments of what they had said remains digging holes in our brain on how to retaliate or even shield ourselves to ignore or to spit out some words... I agree with gab on this one, the words were given were hard to compose, but you really did it well, pretty friend, well done... congrats on winning...

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

4 Years Ago

Hello, Pax! It's been a while of being silent...but I understand you are still in the time of griev.. read more



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your last line really sums it all up, incredible way to describe how humans are self centered.
I liked it.
keep it up

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

4 Years Ago

Thank you for reading
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Pax
"You want to fly yet you carry their heavy rock
You'll find out soon that you're falling back"

- I really like those lines, to which i am able to relate. I wish we could all say that we don't care what they said freely, but sometimes in the end, the fragments of what they had said remains digging holes in our brain on how to retaliate or even shield ourselves to ignore or to spit out some words... I agree with gab on this one, the words were given were hard to compose, but you really did it well, pretty friend, well done... congrats on winning...

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

4 Years Ago

Hello, Pax! It's been a while of being silent...but I understand you are still in the time of griev.. read more
This an incredible poem. You have used the ten words brilliantly to form the message and a true message at that. Well done.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

5 Years Ago

Thank you, Laura
We may not admit this but we, humans, are very self-centered individuals. We sometimes wish others to fall so that we'll take such opportunity to shine. It's so difficult.to make a poem/verse out of those words but you manage it well.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

5 Years Ago

*people.....
gabrielle

5 Years Ago

I get you. When you attain something at an early age, sasabihin nila dahil may MBA ( may backer ako).. read more
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

5 Years Ago

Tapos na ko sa stage na yan. May nakikita ako sa iba, parang ako rin dati. Kaso nong "masipit" na.. read more
unhappiness does not go very far in life, does it?

we need joy to kidnap the sadness, and live each day out of our shell and walking with a smile.

j.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

5 Years Ago

Thanks for reading and sharing your insights about it, sir.
That last line brings it all home, doesn't it. It's so true!
All ten words placed nicely into your poem.
With the ways things are going in this world, I almost feel
like I want to be a crab and hide in my shell forever.
Thank you for your entry into the 10 Words I give contest!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

5 Years Ago

Thank you for the kind words.

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