Doesn't Feel Like Love

Doesn't Feel Like Love

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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you claim your love, 
it's you who stole my heart
yet it doesn't 
feel like love.

you breathe in my breaths, 
it's you that I inhale, exhale 
yet it doesn't 
feel like love.

you dance in my dreams,
it's you in my subconscious mind
yet it doesn't
feel like love.

it doesn't...
it doesn't 
feel
like love.. 



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
Boredom strikes again...

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Hi Yumna. You've been kind enough to comment on some of my work, so I thought I'd return the favour. I looked at several of your more recent ones, but it was this one that I homed in on. Why? I think I find it more accessible. I like the repeats, and the phrases feel real. It's quite short and of course somewhat sad, but it holds together pretty well.

KRs
Nigel

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Hi, Nigel! This is probably the last piece I wrote before I indulged in learning poetical forms.. read more



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What a touching piece, I hope it was fictional?. But it felt as if you were speaking from truth....A beautiful write nevertheless​...*smiles*

Poeticme

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

This was fictional 😉 just an observation on my part.
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it .. read more
Love can be difficult to define our mind may think it one thing yet our heart still feels empty and incomplete

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Yes, I quite agree. Thank you for adding your thoughts here. I appreciate it 😊
The ones who stole our heart and mind in such a selfish way, it only leaves you suffering or feel drained. Drawn of emotion and soberness or even near indifference kicks in..that's what I take from it..
This has a lyrical like character.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

I agree. Thank you for your thoughts here, V! I appreciate it :)
Closed

7 Months Ago

Very welcome, Yumna :)
well I guess what is the feeling of love?... is it the happiness that someone understand you or the pain that you feel when they no longer want you.... however beautifully done

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

I think love is realizing that they can be happy without you and letting them go..
Thank you .. read more
Writing Angel

7 Months Ago

thank you for putting it out there it was an amazing read
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

I'm much humbled, WA 😊
Feels more like obsession-fueled lust... Sounds, rather, like a hollow chase with no palpable dividend gained... As that is what this type of feeling is, to me at least... A sum of monetary exchange... Emptily penned...

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

7 Months Ago

Whew, that is a relief, did not intend "emptily" as a derogatory term... Thanks for understanding..... read more
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

I work by the same principle. Popularity is somewhat childish to wish for lol
You must have m.. read more
Silente

7 Months Ago

I am glad to hear it, and yes... Children abound when things like "popularity" are brought to bear.... read more
mmmm i like the flow of the poem yumna... even in boredom you have woven a beautiful one..

hehe sometimes i keep telling myself these lines...
it doesn't feel like love...
it doesn't feel like love..
still it is still love...as it hurts quiet deep
but what about the other end
i wonder again
it still doesn't feel like love.. :)

i liked the lady in the pic :)


Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Hahah yeah sort of. And I agree somewhat 😉
Galadriel

7 Months Ago

hehe i seem to get only that in life so thats why i said so :)
hope u will find better ones .. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

I wish the same for you too 😊
Even feelings ca get tired and stale... so that we go through the motions of love without feeling the essence... Sad, but true to life...


Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you for sharing your thoughts here, Jibey. I agree. Sometimes love fool our minds..
I c.. read more
This poem shows the state of mind and heart. You feel like it is not love. But the things you feel and the things that cross your mind makes you feel that you are in love. However I feel that this is a very true poem which shows the confused state of mind you have beautifully written it. ☺

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

This was sprouted from a bored mind although yes it does depict confusion but not on my part, just a.. read more
Najam Us Saher

7 Months Ago

:) You're always welcome.

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