Last Breath of Goodbye

Last Breath of Goodbye

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Last Breath of Goodbye

What was left from before,
powerfully merciless;
like dark, ominous clouds
smothering every semblance
of inner light,
has now returned...

That hellhole of your love 
you cast me into,
every inch of my skin crawled,
left the carmine softness
of my heart charred,
my soul burned!

Our last breath of goodbye
lingers in the air …
waiting,
wishing,
wanting,
for me to accept
not having you by my side.

That flame I kept alive;
those embers,
like hot desert winds ~ dried,
sparking back to life...
leave me no choice, 
except to cast them
...all aside!

Thank you J Todd Underhill for giving this piece a voice

 https://soundcloud.com/user-557255780/coffee-with-underhill-05-01-2017





© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
Yet another learning experience of writing poetry with Richard :)

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Breathtaking experience... wow... omg...! This was amazing!

"What was left from before,
powerfully merciless;
like dark, ominous clouds"
Very descriptive and flows well!
Keep it up! :)
Your learning experience with Richard are working very well :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Well, as of now, they're on hold lol
Thank you for liking this one too. I appreciate your wo.. read more
Mr.Writer

8 Months Ago

Lol no problem :D



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Beautiful, sad words.
Perfectly expressed.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it 😊
I love how you painted this subtle wind of inevitability . Sensual and alluring piece, with bittersweet bites. :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Thank you for the appreciation, Ana! I'm glad you liked it :)
Beautiful!

Nothing else needed. This piece is freely perfect ;)

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Thank you for the appreciation, OSS! 😉
I'm glad you liked it 😊
'That flame I kept alive; ~ those embers, like hot desert winds .. .. '

A tragedy of the heart told with such raw phrases. The slide into its finish is near example
to the reader but, if factual, might/must have been painful for the poet. If fiction, you've captured the pain more than graphically.

Your use of words is exceptional. YumnaKay, never too few, never too many. Perhaps via Richard's guidance?

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

I would indeed give Richard the credit of bringing out this side of me 😉
This piece wasn'.. read more
emmajoy

8 Months Ago

Sharing is often the best bandage, especially when emotions ring a bell. x
Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

So rightly said...
How sweetly you honor me, Yumna, with your mentions of my name … but, the real honor and privilege is not only working with you on learning, but in reading and being embraced by the wonder of where your words are derived from within your mind, heart, spirit, and amazingly depthless well of creative ideas and emotions.
Well, I'm smitten … what else to say, but "Thank you ever so sincerely and warmly, Dear, Fine Lady-Poet!" ⁓ Richard : )

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

You always say things to leave me speechless, Richard! Thank you for being there with me in this exc.. read more
Richard

8 Months Ago

Holding your hand … as you pull me along! ✨
WOW!
What a piece, I normally don't read poety as you know, but I am starting to dip my toes into it a little more. This piece had haertbreak written all over it it, and the words you used....om my. Full of anger, frustration and sadness.
The last verse - QUALITY written all over it.

I know I dont normally review poems and I am more of a techinal reviewer with stories So from me there will be no change this/change that.

I will leave you with this instead.

DONT CHANGE ANYTHING. THIS WAS AMAZING.

Mark.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Oh woww! That's a first 😂😂 I'm so glad you finally found a piece of mine which you didn't see .. read more
matrixmark

8 Months Ago

lol. Very stiking piece.

Mark.
Oh but do they go away? Or will the wind bring them forth once again when they blow in your direction, Im sure you will be gone by then, under the sands, or gravel. Well, atleast they cant reach you if you wish to hide.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Interesting perspective.. Thank you for your insight here. I appreciate it :)
Bulls eye on this one. You know just how to make people see and feel your poem. Great as always.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

That's a great compliment! Thank you so much, Jessica. I'm glad you liked it 😊😊
This was a good piece. It was well-colored and used good imagery, as well as strong analogy to harsh elements. It reflects on loss very well.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it :)
This is too awesome..."hellhole" lol...been there! Keep it up. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Thank you, Anastasia. Glad you liked it 😊

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