Search me...

Search me...

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Experimental writing...

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Search me...


Search me...

and you may find me 

embedded in between your lips

as I take in the taste of you;

devouring ~ you are.

 

Search me...

in those lonely nights

when I walked, following a shadow

that turned out to be yours;

mesmerizing ~ you are.

 

Search me...

as you drift towards sleep

and I'll wake up 

resting on your eyelids;

intoxicating ~ you are.




© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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Nice experiment, Yumna Dear! : )
Beautifully suggestive first verse to warm the imagination just right; then, verse two kept imploring that we "search" you … there's a thought in itself worth entertaining … LOL!
Verse three implores again as the crescendo soothes to a soothing climax.
I loved how you wrapped-up each verse with a titillating descriptive of your lover … those three words engender a visually appealing poem in themselves.
I especially enjoy it when you let your pen take the reins of your amazing imagination … the picture adds a soft ambience to the feel, too!

I've missed your poetry! ⁓ Richard : )

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you, Richard. I'm grateful to you for bringing out whatever little poetic voice I do have :)read more
Richard

3 Months Ago

And, You mean a lot to me! : )



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Wow Yumna, I really enjoyed this piece, it was sensual and led the reader to be imaginative. Wonderfully penned :)

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Kesha. Glad you liked it. Truly means a lot 😊
Kesha

5 Months Ago

You are very welcome :)
Woah! This poem intoxicated me as well :D
It was so good Yumna! The way you repeated "you are" and "search me" it enhanced the poem!
Well done!

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Shaan. Glad you liked it :)
oh my, "find me embedded in between your lips"
i wish i had written that...

i surely do.

j.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

That's a huge compliment! Thank you for your nice words here, Jacob. Truly humbled, I am 😊
I love the way you've crafted this with an original structure, repeated for each stanza, yet also new & interesting observations in each. The way you state your observations is very original ("embedded between your lips as I take in the taste of you"), even tho the ideas are very relatable. I especially love the inverted sentence structure of the last line for each stanza . . . it emphasizes your well-chosen descriptors (devouring, mesmerizing, intoxicating).

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

With each passing day I find myself experimenting more and more, perhaps this was brought on by that.. read more
barleygirl

5 Months Ago

Being old & lazy, I find myself seeking the comfort of my "usual" poetic style . . . it takes a lot .. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

I really can't decide on one specific style but hey, calling yourself lazy would be a huge understat.. read more
This is so beautiful, Yumna! Easily one of my favorite poems by you

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Gullia! I'm glad you like it. Your words mean alot to me :)
Well constructed and clearly written with the repated phrase adding feeling and sensitivity -excellent work

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Thank you for appreciating. 😊
George Coombs

5 Months Ago

Your welcome
Cleverly constructed, with the repeated phrases working like a chorus to drive home the message. Some lovely images give the poem some substance - 'the taste of you', 'resting on your eyelid'. The verbs 'Devouring', 'Mesmerizing', 'Intoxicating' are appropriately strong as the language of love.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Jibey. Glad you liked it 😊
' .. resting on your eyelids.. '

Also: invigorating, exciting and inviting, Yumna - seems your new routine has added even more light to your fertile imagination. I iove the honest clarity of this post.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

I would say that new routine has dimmed the light 'cause I write even less...
Thank you for l.. read more
emmajoy

5 Months Ago

There's a saying, 'less is more' (Still learning how to use that quote myself, believe me!). Your l.. read more

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Experimental Poetry


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