Star of My Life

Star of My Life

I remember the times we sat up late,

counting the stars scattered over the nightly sky;

and every time you raised your finger asking:

"Mamma, which is the brightest? Isn't it this one?"

You would point; and I, oblivious of the stars,

for my star lives beside me; within me, making me complete,

would point laughingly at you, my son;

touching your nose lightly, I'd say:

"It's right here, for real stars are not found on the sky,

but in the hearts of their ol' mum..."

Shining brighter than ever, you dim everything else, 

as I fill my eyes with your light...

I remember,

I remember everything;

as I fade away but see you grow...

you; the star of my life. 

Author's Note

This is for all the mothers.. though probably not much..

Reviews

[LazerRays]

Nice yumna! But.... Is there something you forgot to tell me? ;)
I thought you said that you were a... Did something happen along the way?
Hahahaha. Jk XD
it's a beautiful Poe
really. Although sorry, I still think real stars are in the sky. :P

[LazerRays]

*poem haha- not Poe.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:D Sarah, well...you know now. haha
Thanks so much for reading this one and liking (to an extent:P) I think it depends on who you consider as one. And seeing as how much of a softie I am lol for me they exist in this world ;)

[TeeJae {TJ} Hart]

This is absolutely beautiful. I dont have a son but your words reminded me of a special man. Thankyou for sharing

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad my words touched you. Thank you for liking :)

[emmajoy]

'It's right here, for real stars are not found on the sky, ~ but in the hearts of their ol' mum..." ~
Shining brighter than ever, you dim everything else, ~ as I fill my eyes with your light...'

A truly beautiful poem, full of love and light, words finely placed, the best of emotions on display. For a young dentist by profession you have the heart of an ancient goddess.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Haha, then I'm quite a fierce one too at times ;)
Thank you, Emma, for the nice compliments and for liking. Truly appreciate your words :)

[emmajoy]

There's no point in reading someone's creation and not finding the good in it.. too much criticism hits mind and heart!!!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

True.. and I have never seen you criticizing too much... :)

[emmajoy]

After so many years in the café, I've learned the rules and obey then,, most of the time!! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I don't think it has to with spending so much time in the cafe, but with the fact that you're one cool person around here. I've seen quite a few around here who've been here for a long time but still don't know how to be.. civil ;P ;)

[emmajoy]

Smiling, waving a thank you. For me on and offline, good manners and kindness go hand in hand. However, admit to being pretty forthright when needs be. You see, i'm a short, long-haired terrier type! (must stop taking up your space!)

[Manasa.L]

Very beautifully woven words. A Love of mother to his child. Its unconditional, immeasurable. Thanks for sharing. A heart filling poem. Nice!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

True..
Thank you for your kind words of appreciation here, Manasa. I'm glad you liked it :)

[Surya]

Even books aren't enough for mom's but something like your piece works well and true indeed....I loved it..

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much, Surya. That's a nice compliment for me! I'm glad you liked it :)

[Surya]

You are welcome Yumna..:)

[Cameron Berry]

This was a beautiful write. Stars are the cause of much wonderment, but you remind us that there is wonderment to be find in the ones around us, particularly in the mothers of the world. Nice work.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

There is indeed..
Thank you for adding your thoughts here and for your nice comments, Cameron. I'm glad you liked it 😊

[Michael G. Smith]

I love poems like this one. Goodly mothers are gifts from God; angels on earth.I miss my mom more than any other thing .

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Indeed they are. I feel blessed to have mine with me 😊
Thank you for liking, Michael. Appreciate your words 😊

[Richard🖌]

What a lovely and thoughtful homage to Mothers, Yumna … you've touched my olde heart deeply, and I know Ray and Curtis will surely feel blessed, too.
Your word choices, phraseology, and metaphor serve so very well in conveying the sweet beauty of the story, and not a forced or pretentious line or emotion anywhere … one to be proud of.

Simply a gorgeous piece straight from your heart, with such a fitting picture and presentation … kudos! ⁓ Richard : )

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This was straight from my heart. I rarely feel proud of what I write but this one is what will stay with me forever 😊
I'm glad it touched you too. Thank you so much for appreciating, Richard. It means a lot to me 😊

[Richard🖌]

Well, Yumna,
We all here know how very special you are; it is one that will stay with me, too … thank you so much.

[aLittlePain]

With the deepest regard and appreciation, thank you. Curtis & Ray xo

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It was my pleasure to write. Thank you too for encouraging me to write 😊

[V]

That's a very kind and lovely dedication. It's filled with love and sincere empathy. I also like the storytelling effect of it very much. A nice writing.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This one really was emotional for me to write. But it really was Ray, who made me believe that I can write from this aspect too.
I'm glad you liked it, Vanessa. Thank you 😊💜

[V]

I'm glad she encouraged you. You can do many things and it starts with confidence. I really like it and I can feel the emotions seeping through your words. 😊

[Dr. YumnaKay]

True, it is about confidence...

[V]

Yes 😊 And you'll get over the time, sometimes a little supports is helpful though. 😉

[William Liston]

Wow ... this piece is beautiful ... I don't think there's a better way to describe it. I like how this piece conveys various themes such as the strength of a mother's love, the innocence of a child, the wonder of a night sky, the beauty of simplicity, the curiosity of a child ... you did a great job of blending those nuances together. Also, from a more technical standpoint, I loved your use of punctuation.

One minor critique: The picture doesn't seem genuine to me because of those spirals and squares on it. I think those were put there for copyright purposes. Their inclusion, in my opinion, really hinders the first impression of the piece.

- William Liston

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for this amazing review, William! When I posted it, I thought it was lame on my part but glad to see the effect it created..
Punctuations are what Richard has really tried hard to teach me. Thank you for noticing that as well 😊

About the pic, well I have my reservations too on it but I couldn't find a better alternative to go with everything described in this piece...

I truly appreciate your liking it 😊😊

[William Liston]

Have you read Richard's blog post on punctuation? If not, I suggest you to do so ... it's very informative.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hmm I haven't.. Thank you for suggesting. I will surely check it out 😊

[William Liston]

It's titled "On Breaking Grammar Rules In Poetry" or something similar.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Okay, will check 😇