In Quiet Remembrance ...

A bit dreamy. Experimental.

I laid myself bare, in quiet remembrance,

as midnight spilled its gifts, 

and sparkles of dawn slithered in, 

smothering the beauty of what was left;

as Julys became long forgotten memories,

and October gave way to new beginnings,

 of fervent hopes and utopic dreams ...

I laid myself bare, in quiet remembrance.

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Wonderful Free Versing, YumnaKay!
A+ on this one.
In a gorgeous presentation, color and font choice … simply captivating and wispy, with a tender, ethereal ambience … splendid illustration to accompany and augment the whole, too.
Check "July(s)".
I'm completely satisfied with this example of just how well you've developed in your Free Verse skills.
Especially notable are the emotions that reach out and grip the senses, taking one from the material into your own world … the hallmark of a keenly accomplished poetess … not to mention how you've taken it full circle by "booking" your refrain of line one as your last.

Just an all around fine work that I really and truly enjoyed … thank you so very much! ⁓ Richard : )

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, this is the best review I've gotten so far from you, Richard! :D Thank you so much for humbling me with your appreciation. I'm glad you enjoyed this one :))
Regarding that correction, I did mean Julys, not July, but I'll look into it. Thank you, once again. (:

[Richard🖌]

I want you to know I appreciate and enjoy your poetry, Yumna … you're most welcome, and thank you, too. : )
Guess I wondered why Julys and not Octobers?
But, I'm so simple, I never was any good at interpreting vague meanings … LOL!

[Neville]

delightfully dreamy tho in my opinion..

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad you think so, Nev. Thanks so much :))

[Neville]

thoroughly enjoyed..

[Einstein Noodle]

I like the title and it's repetition ...your poem opens my own thoughts and feelings in just such a place ...sometimes the object of our love is gone ...but feelings certainly remain .. wishing that person was still there we can only lay ourselves bare ... falling on a solid rock ... secure our vulnerability will not be betrayed ... that's what your poem says to me ..plus in remembrance we can reveal parts that perhaps we could not when the relationship was real ... perhaps one of the reasons the loss occurred ... sorry Doc! i got a little carried away didn't i?!
E.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Nah, not at all carried away, Einstein. Always appreciate your thoughts 'cause they add on to mine :)) thank you so much for liking :D

[barleygirl]

This is a graceful-sounding & original message that leaves us to wander off on such a moment when nostalgia sparks a whimsical journey *sigh!* Hope your holiday season is bright with love (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating this one, BG. Glad you felt that way :))
And ah, no holiday over here but it's def bright ;) :D
Hope life's treating you well. Hugs back :))

[Ardra]

Beautiful Yumna... quiet dreamy feel to it.... :) the moon child is shining in this one heheh....enjoyed reading it..

[Dr. YumnaKay]

December does that to me ;P lol
Thank you so much, Ardra. Glad you enjoyed reading. :)

[lightsong]

as I've said before You shine the brightest in this style, another much enjoyable read, to be felt, to be drown in and drift with. wistful and sadly haunting.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I do think this style is my favourite and the one I'm most comfortable in writing ;) thank you so much for appreciating and your lovely words, dear Light. :))

[lightsong]

You are great in everything You write with :)