Lost In A Maze of Thoughts

Lost In A Maze of Thoughts

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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A fun write. Letting my imagination get the better of me. lol

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This morning, while inspired 
by an urge to take
a walk, I crept out 
of bed, with the agony 
of washing my face 
on a cold December day.

Shivers went down 
my spine, but still
intent to have my lazy 
limbs stretch a bit,
I dragged my feet 
along the garden side.

Felt the grass on my 
tingling bare toes,
sniffed the air a little 
and amused myself
with butterflies taking turns 
on flowers all around.

Until I found myself 
peering through 
a bush from where 
blinked two black eyes.
Staring back, I tried 
hard not to blink...

But of course, I did...! 
Only to straighten up
and turned to find myself 
in a whole other world!
A maze, it was, with 
my wayward thoughts,

from a previous life, 
which drifted through the air
like tiny wisps of smoke, 
untouchable and beyond reach...
in search for ideas, 
I'd let my thoughts amiss. 

Before getting lost, 
in that maze of thoughts,
those soulless eyes 
from the garden bush,
gazed at me from 
the ground and I saw...

those were of a hideous rat 
chasing its stumpy tail!
That's when I realized, 
all along, wherever I went,
I'd been staring into 
my own dreary reflection...!



© 2018 Dr. YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
It's been a while since I wrote something light so it does seem a bit sketchy but oh well... :x

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Don't know that I'd call this light. If light is the intention, you might want to tweak the ending. But, if not, it drifts rather handily into the dark. I might still rework it a little for grammar, flow, and clarity's sake -- not sure, but, they were those? or they belonged to? or something to that effect? You get my drift.

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

Oh, the dark part in the end was kinda intentional and in a way humorous, along the lines of me bein.. read more
Lyn Anderson

1 Week Ago

I like the dark twist. The turn surprised me as I took your "light" literally. Silly me.
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

:D thanks again, I don't really have a dark humour side so it's fun exploring.
And not silly .. read more



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You being a narcissist is a bit silly Yumna but I really enjoyed this ballet of the butterfly...I can see you stark and lost...this tiny light shining as the butterfly leads you dancing through this crazed maze...at the end you awake back in the garden ...had it been all a dream....those beady black eyes tell you the truth of it...the emptiness of life....the pursuit of magical....

Posted 5 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Days Ago

Ah, you're too kind, Queenie (but then you are the queen here ;P) I do think I'm a narcissist up to .. read more
Lost in a maze of thought ???
This reads a bit like my life just now
Just recently I have been in a maze of things to do
Thoughts of things to write just drift away
In a roundabout of fetch and carry; watch the food & turn down when if comes to a boil; what can I buy Aunt XYZ foe Christmas


Posted 5 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Days Ago

Thank you so much for reading and your words here :-)
That last twist definitely connected everything. Felt so relatable.
However it was a treat visualising the piece through your eyes.

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Days Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely words here, m-d. Glad you appreciate. :)
That Dec. walking in bare feet ain't really too neat and those butterflies must have been a surprise!
Is this comment about your dreary reflection the reason you have changed your picture? (lol)
An interesting garden walk
Dave

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Days Ago

haha probably! My last avatar was too cheery to go with this write lool
Thank you so much fo.. read more
Such a long write but so well worth it, This is a very interesting write and so full of emotions, well written

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Days Ago

I'm not normally into longer writes but it was fun writing this one and def worth it for me as well... read more
Smiling... loving every line! Thank you for taking us on this journey, creeping through worlds and wonderlands in search of sweet glimpses and dark reflections. Alice's adventures have always been some of my favorites, and your playful language reminds me of her, discovering the world is nothing as it might have seemed. Write on dear poet!

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

An owl on the moon

5 Days Ago

You know it! I always was a bit mad. :D
Dr. YumnaKay

5 Days Ago

We're all the by-product of our (in)sanity. ;)
But oh, I always was a bit dreamy. :P
An owl on the moon

5 Days Ago

Yes, oh so true! Hoping you always find your path leading you down the rabbit hole to sweeter dream.. read more
You're quite an adventurer, aren't you? You're always prepared to diversify, go here or there on whims and brief what-have yous! This piece surprised me.. seems a mix of thoughts, 'light' and otherwise, a haphazard sort of journey, quite personal, lifting a corner of your often hidden silliness which is delightful! Congratulations for taking Yourself and me on a colourful ride on... a reflection in space!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Days Ago

haha well, I guess I really let myself loose on the keyboard then ;P glad to have you surprised over.. read more
emmajoy

6 Days Ago

Letting loose is flying to the moon wearing little but hope, apparently!! :)
Mmm, so you connected with something even though you didnt want to lol, funny.

We are all connected regardless of our mental concepts of the "Other". The rat is no less than us.

Anyways Really pleasant and well flowing. You are skillful

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Days Ago

True that. Thank you so much for reading and appreciating :)
Wonderful story shared dear friend. The maze of thoughts can make us see and believe in some mystery and wonder. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating this one, John :)
Coyote Poetry

1 Week Ago

I did enjoy and you are welcome my friend.
Don't know that I'd call this light. If light is the intention, you might want to tweak the ending. But, if not, it drifts rather handily into the dark. I might still rework it a little for grammar, flow, and clarity's sake -- not sure, but, they were those? or they belonged to? or something to that effect? You get my drift.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

Oh, the dark part in the end was kinda intentional and in a way humorous, along the lines of me bein.. read more
Lyn Anderson

1 Week Ago

I like the dark twist. The turn surprised me as I took your "light" literally. Silly me.
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

:D thanks again, I don't really have a dark humour side so it's fun exploring.
And not silly .. read more

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