No Escape

No Escape

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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That feeling of being trapped in your own mind is what this speaks of (I think). Experimental.

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Sometimes, it felt like a set up. The world she lived in and the world she stepped into. A distinct line separating the two. 

The world she lived in, which was once a refuge, now became a deluge -- of wrapped up emotions, unspoken pains and horrendous acts of which she left no trails ... buried.

The world she stepped into, which was once what she strayed away from, became a relief; an escape from the world she lived in -- of faked smiles, energy spikes and a made up persona of which she was the unequivocal mistress ... without distress. 

Until - the two worlds merged and she could no longer distinguish between them. Collided, they came off more powerful as one; bringing forth the destruction she knew that laid around the corner, waiting to grab her from the edges of which she had ... no escape. 



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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Dr. YumnaKay
Captcha - agitable ... interesting lol

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Good job combining interesting word choices to describe a mind-boggling scenario that many of us experience from time to time. I'm bipolar, so I definitely understand how the mind can become a trap, grinding on stuff & perceiving life thru the lens of "mania" or "depression" . . . and then your piece takes this a step further, when everything is combined into a big mess. The best part is the way you use dynamic verbs in your descriptions (energy spikes, moods collided, grabbing her from the edges) -- conveys the sensations of an attack from within.

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you for your thoughts here, BG. I like the way you perceive my pieces. Truly appreciated (:



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I have often wondered why dreams can be so bizarre, but whilst in that dream mode everything seems logical. I think your poem has described and even explored this situation, but like the dream sequence, even logic becomes illogical.

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

This is an interesting interpretation. Now reading my piece again, it does seem like it though that .. read more
Wow... This is really thought provoking. Gives a real sense of loneliness and confusion, that "I don't belong" feeling is portrayed really well. A deep look at life, and I think a lot of people can relate to this kind of feeling.
Your style of writing is really good, I think is the first non-poem piece I've read by you. I really like this.

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

I do have written prose although I would so like to excel in it more than I (supposedly) excel in po.. read more
Sinbulvinter

3 Months Ago

I think you did very well in this. I really liked it. I love your poetry too!
Interesting idea she can't fit in either world alone anymore and she sees things tearing up at the edges.

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you for your words here (:
Amazing write, as always Yumna. This was a pretty awesome poem to read in the morning :)

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Gullia!! Thank you for appreciating this write (: Glad you like it 😊
Hope your day goes o.. read more
Life is a fancy dress for many people, so much so their thoughts congeal into a knot of disbelief and self.wonder or more so, when writing, a bewilderment of creativity and fact. That is how i interpret your words, in places muddled, in places precisely stated. Interesting concept here, sweet pea.

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you, Emma. I like how you interpret this piece. I appreciate your words here 😊
emmajoy

3 Months Ago

I do try, honestly! :)
"Until - the two worlds merged and she could no longer distinguish between them. Collided, they came off more powerful as one; bringing forth the destruction she knew that laid around the corner, waiting to grab her from the edges of which she had ... no escape. "

I love how relatable this poem is as we do not simply d live in only one world but in thousands of one each fitting a thought in your mind.

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you, Tania. I appreciate you liking this piece and relating. (:
I guess this might have been how Julian Assange felt all those many months in the Ecuadorian Embassy. Sanctuary had become prison.

good old captcha eh? lol
Good one Yumna.

p.s. some people in Life can provide us with metaphorical 'file in a cake' to aid escape.

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Interesting comparison, Tony. I remember really mulling over Assange's actions and what he would hav.. read more
A super powerful and emotional piece Yumna... It carries out realistically while informing the readers in an engaging and clear way!
This really speaks to many of us as our mind and thoughts take over and create images that look so real, but aren't... and can possibly ruin our lives.. make us think negatively and turn us into people we aren't
Well done Yumna, keep it up! :)

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you for sharing your thoughts, Shaan. I appreciate it :)
Good job combining interesting word choices to describe a mind-boggling scenario that many of us experience from time to time. I'm bipolar, so I definitely understand how the mind can become a trap, grinding on stuff & perceiving life thru the lens of "mania" or "depression" . . . and then your piece takes this a step further, when everything is combined into a big mess. The best part is the way you use dynamic verbs in your descriptions (energy spikes, moods collided, grabbing her from the edges) -- conveys the sensations of an attack from within.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you for your thoughts here, BG. I like the way you perceive my pieces. Truly appreciated (:
Lots of creativity. Good work.

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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you. I appreciate your words here (:
S.M. “Sam” Shapiro

3 Months Ago

Your welcome :)

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