Collapsing

Letting out my darker thoughts for once. Ramblings of a raging mind.

I feign innocence, embracing the thought that I'm all knowing, the veils of my arrogance strung tight. The bloody hound within roars its disapproval, waiting to be unleashed, sneaking; searching for a way out. 

And there are nights when it does, nights, where it escapes its solitary confinement, spitting in rage.

Invisible cotton stares engulf me, traces of guilt wrap themselves around as the creature inside purrs... ravenous - another night to feed on to, another night to hold on to ... 

it has found its next prey, until the next time, while I break ~ collapsing ...

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I can relate to this so much! I envy writers that can release the depth & power of raw unfiltered responses to people & life. Even if I try to do such a commentary, it comes out flippant rather than gut-wrenching. Here, you've touched on gut-wrenching, in a good way (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

When I first decided to start writing, I wanted to be a fiction/novel writer, but somehow came into writing poetry. So there are times, when I do try prose in terms of penning out my darker thoughts which wouldn't really fit in poetry. I'm glad you like it. And that's definitely a great compliment for me, coming from you :D Thank you so much :)

[J. Hampton]

we all have a lurking demon of one sort or another
I liked that this leaves us to ask ourselves...as well
nice

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad it made you reflect. Thank you so much for appreciating, J :)

[R.E. Ray]

True art is created when artists shed their layered armor and make themselves vulnerable to the world, revealing themselves in a normal, yet often unflattering light, and still teach us something valuable about the world and ourselves. Thanks for sharing this piece with us. It shows your strength and humility.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree with your words. Thank you for reflecting and sharing your thoughts, Robert. Appreciated :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Hello my friend. I liked this poem. Honest thoughts took reader to private thoughts and places.
"Invisible cotton stares engulf me, traces of guilt wrap themselves around as the creature inside purrs, ravenous; another night to feed on to, another night to hold on to ... "
I liked the above lines. Left the reader with something to think about. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your words here and for liking 😊

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy and you are welcome my friend.

[Einstein Noodle]

oooooooooooooo subtle ravenous lover perhaps ... don't we all have our inner demons to contend with ...one can not avoid them if we are to truly live ..i like your little darkness poem ..intriguing ..especially coming from the good Doctor ;)))
E.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahaha even the good dr jekyll had a mr hyde hidden somewhere 😜
Thank you for your thoughts here, Einstein! I hope you're having a good time 😊

[Einstein Noodle]

i am Doc...having a great time! i don't have much but i am retired and this chapter is incomparable to any before it ...overall speaking of course :) and i love the Cafe...its a regular part of my life ..the interactions and poetry are challenging, stimulating and growth potentiating .. plus... as in my about me..i am hopeful the Dementia bug is kept at bay by making the noodle work a bit ..big love to ya!

[matrixmark]

For a short piece, this was - WOW shall we say. I really loved yor usage of words on this. The feelings I felt whilst my eyes read through it were - angry, dark, dangerous, lethal. I don't think I have ever seen you write on the dark side - maybe you should do it some more. This really was pretty damn powerful.

Mark.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm just learning to take that side out ;) I'm glad you liked this piece, Mark. It's great seeing you back around here. Thank you so much for appreciating. 😊
Merry Christmas to you btw 😀

[matrixmark]

I live on the dark side of writing as you know, so to come across this piece was very VERY interesting for me to read. Good to see that you are still writing, I will get to more of your work as and when I can.
Of course I will appreciate your work - It is and always has been so worth it.

Merry Christmas to you too.

Mark.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Of course, I don't intend to stop writing until like forever :p
That really means a lot, thanks again! I hope you enjoy the holidays 😊

How's the book coming on? ;)

[matrixmark]

Good to hear that you will persue writing forever. You have a great talent, and people with talent. should always persue it.
I will enjoy the holday - thank you saying. I hope you enjoy yours too and that it bring much happiness and joy.

As for the book - I am cranking the fear factor up to the max. It's looking better than ever.

Mark.