Invisible To You

Invisible To You

A Chapter by Closed
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A sequel to "Shield"

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Invisible to you 
Standing there in front of you
Yet your eyes see right 
through me.
Blurred, broken images form 
In my eyes
From the night when you said,
"It's all over, 
there is no 'us',
just 'you' and 'me', going our separate ways"

And I accept it. This numbing, yet ever present pain which resides in me like a malignant disease,
to which there is no cure.

And I accept it. This fate, a gift by you, the last thing that I'll have, 
that although I never moved from your sight 
yet I'm
Invisible to you...



© 2017 Closed



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It's a sad thing when this happens to us, and can be very tough to deal with. But it is also better to have loved than never to have loved at all. (It means nothing at the time but as time goes by, we heal and start to reflect on things differently)

These moments happen to many of us. Yes...it breaks us down, but also it makes us stronger.

Some perfect choice of words in this piece. Well done....

Mark.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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10 Months Ago

I agree. Time is the best healer.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts here and for the appre.. read more
matrixmark

10 Months Ago

No worries, always a pleasure.
Mark.


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Ah! one of the most common feelings of being lost and caped-camouflaged under the shadow of temporal misery.

Causes:
selflessness
love
excessive empathy

Symptoms:
Pain
sadness
(and utterly pure yet connivingly vivid art) Rare and Expensive

Control:
admire the reflection in the dimmest of lights
With time...


Heartbreak is common, but your poem was oddly heartwarming and satisfying. Your words made me smile.

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10 Months Ago

Thank you for the in depth assessment here. I'm glad it made you smile. 😊
Saud Maroof

10 Months Ago

thank you for sharing.
Oh this is wrenching and beautiful. No word is wasteful in this piece. My emotions had a little workout as I read it. I'll look forward to reading more of your work.

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I'm glad it touched you. Thank you for the appreciation. It means a lot 😊
That's a deep one. Well-written, one of my favs by you, I think. I also really like the picture you chose for this piece, the missing head like a missing identity, a form of invisibility.
Sad topic though, sad because I can relate to the feeling...

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I didn't write this from my point of view though yes I've felt like this at sometime. Maybe that's w.. read more
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10 Months Ago

Certainly relatable for many. There are some really good lines in it, you're very welcome. :)
Such is the heartbreak of separation... captured so well here...

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10 Months Ago

Yes it is ..
Thank you 😊
It's a sad thing when this happens to us, and can be very tough to deal with. But it is also better to have loved than never to have loved at all. (It means nothing at the time but as time goes by, we heal and start to reflect on things differently)

These moments happen to many of us. Yes...it breaks us down, but also it makes us stronger.

Some perfect choice of words in this piece. Well done....

Mark.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Closed

10 Months Ago

I agree. Time is the best healer.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts here and for the appre.. read more
matrixmark

10 Months Ago

No worries, always a pleasure.
Mark.
Boy, haven't we all had this moment or moments in our loves history. I say it's worth the pain to love and lose than to never have loved at all. (I think someone else said that also) Yon convey the dread emotionn well.

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And I would say better to be lost and then love...
Thank you for sharing your thoughts here! .. read more
"Invisible to you" unfortunately something I can relate to. Your poem is tenderly written and heartfelt. :) Julie

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10 Months Ago

I feel sad to hear that you can relate to this.
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it 😊
This follow on from ‘Shield’ continues the theme of broken dreams, but in a more poignant poetical examination of a hurtful personal experience. Your write expresses a view from the perspective of the injured party. Whereas, the source of this wounded heart remains oblivios to the pain that is felt. Well done …

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10 Months Ago

Yes, that was the intention. I did not write this from my point of view..
Thank you! I'm glad.. read more
beautiful and touching, i love you work

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Thank you! I'm glad you liked it 😊
Yumna, a big wow!! It touches the heart very deeply and I love the flow.

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Deeeeeply Abused

10 Months Ago

My pleasure was to read. :)
Deeeeeply Abused

10 Months Ago

But I think, I haven't read shield yet....will check it out sometime.
Closed

10 Months Ago

Sure! Feel free 😊

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